The Giant

Hello there, felistia!

When I finished this little poem, I was mind blown. I believe what you're trying to express is that, although African people have suffered greatly, they're still full of life. Africa is a giantic continent, and although its inhabitants may not to be able to speak up for themselves (as if they have no mouth), they beckon to us as if saying "Help me." I'm very sorry if that isn't the meaning you had in mind.

In my opinion, the lack of words works at your favor ! It leaves the meaning to the imagination, so this poem could spark a very deep and meaningful discussion.

Moving on to the formatting and word choice, they're both just fine. In my opnion, it's a wonderful poem.

Yours truly,

Erika Hale

Wha.....what.....

What?

I think I know what your trying to say but uh, the lack of words doesn't help. Just add more words. Add anything.

Sup.
Alrighty! So this review, like Cello's, is going to be a little short - as your poem is short. But I'll do my best with it.

You don't have anything in particular that speaks out to me - just some things in general that I think could enhance it.

1. Imagery:
We already know you're good with imagery and description, so add a little in there! Too much will take away the short meaning of it, so just a line or so. But right now it's kind of plain... "Jazz it up"!

2. Rhyme:
Alright, so personally I think rhyme would help with the flow of it - but it's really just my preference. Maybe you could make the last line rhyme with the third to last line ("but it spoke to me"). I feel like that would really put an emphasis on the meaning, if you can figure out a rhyme or two for the end.

Anyway, this was pretty nice! Like I said before, there were just a few things in general that I think could improve in this. Pretty nice job! Keep writing!

~Snazz Pizzazz

'Ello, it's Cello!

I'm going to say it now. This review is going to be terribly short. After all, this work is only thirty-six words long.

This was a very interesting thing to read. It wasn't at all what I was expecting but I could definitely sense your deep love for Africa.

For the most part, you're consistent. Your line length, your word usage, your rhythm. It all stayed the same. I noticed one (very small) thing though. Most of your lines are properly punctuated but the first one needs a period and the sixth one needs a comma. It's a very minor thing but in such a small work, little things can be a big deal.

Another thing- You could really add to the vocabulary here and make this writing seem a lot more meaningful than it already appears.

but it was alive.