Bluebells at Twilight

Hi!

This poem is obviously very romantic and I really enjoyed it! I thought your word choice was a little juvenile however. Words like sparkle, twinkle, shimmer, glitter, and gleam, for me, lack the maturity and depth that a romantic poem requires. That said, you structured the poem wonderfully and it definitely conveyed an easily visualized image.
Sorry if If this reviews was a little harsh,
I truly enjoyed this poem!
Keep em' coming!

Hi.

This poem is mechanically sound. Your flow is nice and your word choice is really good. However the entire poem is one long piece of imagery making it feel like your smashing your readers over the head with the feeling your trying to portray. One well placed piece of imagery can re-create the effect you used four to five lines to make. For example, you could simply say in one line,

Frost falls drowsily onto silken petals, dancing quietly into sleep......

A line like the one above is enough to tell the readers what your theme. (Note the line above is just an example, not a reflection on your own poem even though it uses some of the same words.) The important thing to do in a poem that's all about theme is to add an emotion. A piece of emotion can say much more than simple adjectives and verbs.

Other than this, your work is fine as far as I'm concerned.

Keep writing.

Grrrreeeeaaaaattt.... I loved it. You put us in a magical place with this piece. It takes us to a whole different world or plain of existence if you will. The thing is I love how you write and you're writing is pure art and talent. I couldn't really find anything wrong with this piece it was really well written and developed. Have fun with you're writing. This is really good. Don't ever forget that. You have talent so keep writing.

Hi felistia!
This poem you wrote is so lovely. I love the wording you used and the way you described the scenery to make the reader imagine an elegant, mystical place. It's obvious you have a lot of talent, and this piece highlights that fact.

As far as technical stuff goes, such as grammar, you did a great job. The only thing I'd suggest is putting a coma between thin and green, since that's a description. "Thin, green stems"

Anyways, that's all I have to say. Otherwise, this poem is beautiful and I can't wait to read more from you!

Hello, Felistia. Eternity here to review this beautiful poem.

I normally don't review poetry much but I saw this because the title caught my eye. I really enjoyed reading this poem and I love the picture you painted here. You really dazzled me, honestly. I also really like the entirety of this piece because I see you put a lot of thought into the poem.

As far as punctuation and spelling, you did great. I'm not sure you meant to have a comma after stream and the only reason I point that out is because the second line has a period. Comma, period, comma, period. That's all though

Have a nice day.

This poem is really amazing. I like the way you used adjectives to really paint a picure of what you see. I also think that using long, flowy(!) sentences really made the poem fit together. I can imagine a countryside home , near a stream, with beautiful flowers all around. And I loved how the poem can be interpreted in many diffrent ways, each person seeing in the words what they want to see. It`s peaceful, and calming to imagine a place like the one you describe. The only thing I would change is the break in the middle. It seems to cut the poem in half and disrupt the flow. The poems short and sweet, so Stanzas aren`t really nessesarry. But other than that It`s REALLY beautiful. Keep Writing! I`m excited to see more of your work.

~Lucy