Fingers of scarlet flame touch the night,
The stars dancing in the fire's light.
Burning crimson embers gleam and glow,
As an evening wind begins to blow.
Whipping up the forks of shimmering fire,
Tossing the crackling flames ever higher.
Sparks of gold soar against the ebony sky,
as the amber coals start to flicker and die.
Fading from blazing red to bone white,
As they give way to the blackened night.
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Oh my! This was just splendid! I can't believe how well written this is. You showed me so such in just ten stanzas. I really think you are gifted in this department. Gifted with a natural skill for poems. I love that it rhymed and just everything about it. I really don't find any fault in it at all. If I could I'd give you twenty likes.
Keep writing so I can keep reviewing!
~Keep
Thank you so much for the review.
I do have another poem that I just wrote called Autumn Trails. https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work/felistia/Autumn-Trails-128547 It has a similar format to this one.
The rhyme and the flow on its own is amazing.I like the way you write and when I read this it goes on forward so smoothly like it is prefectly written so I do not think I have complains.I am looking forward seeing more of your works!This review was not that helpful but I just wanted to say how I feel about this.It is not forced and all is connected.
Thank you for more encouraging words.
P.S could you please leave a like, thanks.
Hey!
I'm really glad you're back and I can tell that you're poetry has gotten better. I don't have much to say that relates to improving this poem because I thought it was really, really good. It's so poetic and beautiful. I love it! The rhyme didn't feel forced at all! I love how almost all your poem relate in some way to dragons xD this one has fire in it which makes me think dragons xD
Anyway this was awesome! I'm really glad to see that you're poetry has improved. It was amazing to begin with and now it's even better! Have a wonderful day, you wonderful poet,
Alice ♥
Hey, tia! Gonna leave a short review.
Hmm, the theme is actually beautifully simple and I can imagine the scenery myself. Beautifull~
Now, the real review-
First, I felt like there was an "overdose" of adjectives. It's really not something bad..but, it was just my feeling. And, some words seemed to kill the flow. Also, there was only description in there. It's ok, if you wanna keep it like that.
That's all. Sorry, I couldn't help you more. Just gotta log out fast..