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the monster in the maze

by erilea


for those who do not recognize the names they have been given.

the monster in the maze was born from a tumor,

what the doctors called an abnormality. a grudge

metastasized. it was not always in the maze,

but they called it ungrateful for refusing milk,

as milk was not what it needed, because a thing born from a tumor

does not grow but rather festers, does not feed but rather devours,

and it took the doctors only a little while to realize it wanted

blood.

that is where the maze began.

it needed pastures and blood. and kings only have

so much of each but what kings do have

is people, and that's when it became the monster in the maze,

when it began taking other mothers' children,

which is how it counted the time since the sky

had been turned into stone: fourteen bodies

make one year,

and another,

and each year after that it was forced to see.

but a monster in a maze may be a misnomer.

some say mazes only become such when they have something to hide.

others say that heroes need battles so perhaps

it was only when the boy came that it became a monster.

or perhaps it was when the blade ran through and death followed,

but monsters should not find their deaths a relief, so then it must have been

when the hero returned alive and tragic

and they needed a thing to make his tragedy alright:

at least there was a monster to vanquish.

yes, that must be it.

but when you ask the bearer of the tumor

she says he used to fit in my arms. and when you ask its sister she says he’s just

another who was left behind,

and when you ask the all-seeing stars, they respond they witnessed no monster

but only a child.

and the inventor?

through the bars of his cell he shows you his hands and says:

the monster is the blade of my chisel,

and the blocks of stone i cut, and the first brick i laid.

the monster is the maze, and above all,

it is the scar on my thumb that aches when i carve.

these names will outlive us, he says, as do all the things we make,

and all we can do is ask for the grace of time.

the ghosts of children are our reminders of sin, and all we can do

is ask the world to be forgiving.


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Thu Nov 07, 2024 9:15 am
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Thu Nov 07, 2024 9:14 am
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The author has a reflective tone, contemplating themselves and their creative journey, often looking back on the past with a sense of nostalgia and showing growth over time. Their writing carries a gentle humor and self-deprecation, making it feel relatable to readers. Cultural elements and works, from Greek mythology to K-pop and Percy Jackson, are woven into the author’s perspective.block blast




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Wed Nov 06, 2024 7:04 pm
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Woww it was very good the meaning is still layered in between many complexities but still it felt good




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Wed Nov 06, 2024 3:24 am
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Hai :3

Ahh this is stunning!! It's like a a dark, twisting descent that reads like a myth. I’m absolutely hooked on the way you’ve woven the classic story of the Minotaur into something so introspective!! It doesn’t just tell a story; it unearths one, piece by piece, like chiseling away at stone. There's a perfect balance between violence and sorrow ~~ Like, that brutality comes like second nature, and it's so haunting!!

the monster in the maze was born from a tumor,
what the doctors called an abnormality. a grudge
metastasized


I am floored by this !!!

I think that transforming the monster into something biological is such a twist!! The ambiguity of who or what the real monster is keeps me on edge too. Is it the child? The maze? The inventor’s chisel? You leave just enough of a mystery for each of them, almost implicating the reader as they dig into the poem. I love that!! I always dislike when poems hand the readers the nuance behind the imagery, so this is a very welcome change!! It flows naturally in it too, which is great!!

The language is vividly sensory, and that’s one of your greatest strengths!! However, there’s a looseness to the progression that at times makes it difficult to track where the narrative is going. Each stanza almost reads as its own reflection, but the transitions are a bit ambiguous ~~ Like, we're moving from the maze’s origins to the Minotaur’s hunger, then to perspectives on the “monster" or whatnot. It's very thematic, but it doesn't exactly make for an easy read!!

Also, the creator!! Giving him a voice earlier on would make his final reflections feel more like the culmination of an internal struggle. As it stands right now, it doesn't feel like he is important to the narrative. He is though!!

the monster is the maze, and above all,
it is the scar on my thumb that aches when i carve.


!!! I have no words to describe what this made me feel!!

That line is a showstopper!! It grounds everything in a moment of personal revelation that echoes to everything. Like, it's touching every part of the story with something both tactile and hauntingly metaphysical. There’s so much here about what we create, what we can’t undo, and how history twists those creations into names and legends that outlive us. That's the real nail in the coffin though!! We ache to create even when it hurts us. What an incredible idea to write about like this!!

This poem feels like a lament and a confession all at once. It's complex and layered to the point I feel like I am missing something. Besides that, amazing work!! ^_^

- Payton




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HildegardHope says...



ooo minotaur





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