Hidden Memories

Good topic! Very relatable. I actually find old things all the time! Overall the poem is really good. It doesn't really have a flow to it but it's still good. I'm not that good with punctuation but I think it's correct. I couldn't write near this good when I was your age. Keep up the good word!
~Lauren

This is a great poem. I can relate to it because when I clean my room, I will like find these things I forgot about, and start playing with them! No joke! I will also find like cards from friends and family, and just like start reading them! So I can relate the this stanza:

you find a long lost toy?

Maybe some hand-made book you constructed in third grade.

Or it could be an old flyer about your school's talent show.

Whatever it was, did it ever cause your memory dam to break,

cause your old memory waters to come spilling out?

You playing on the ground, throwing a plastic toy around?

It is exactly what I would do! I think this was a great piece, a written well! I agree with ShirinKaul with how the phrase and name "hidden memories" was the perfect title! Great job! Keep writing!

Nice. It has a good message. The ending line : "They're all hidden memories." I think it was a nice and clever choice to write hidden memories in a seperate line. it created a strong effect.
But the punctuations are a little awkward.
I like the line," I know the feeling."
Overall, the idea is really nice.
Keep writing!

What a wonderful idea. What you have here is a good skeleton to start another poem from, I think. If you would give this poem another look, I would suggest picking one item to write about more specifically, and then you could tell people who read this poem how this item affected you, so people could empathize with your experience and understand the idea of your poem with you having to ask these people outright whether they have felt this certain way or not.

It's nice! Keep writing!

I Love this, i still have hidden memories that i forgot about until i see something that reminds me. All my writing and all my books that i did in 3rd grade yes, i wrote some much and still itll this day im writing. HAve you ever held onto a dream when you where little and think now like Dang, i was so ugly. I still am young but not 7 or 8 . but i like this its like you remember things. and i can relate to this. I really didnt see anything wrong with it but if i did please correct me.