I once went up to you and said,
"Do you know me?"
You replied no.
My real name,
my school,
my personal life---
they are all unknown to you.
Check out this username---
unknown391625.
That is the only username that's true.
You're unknown.
The random numbers describe you.
Okay, look at my username:
wisegirl22.
How do you know that's true?
How do you know I don't act stupid out of YWS?
That's right---you don't.
Now all of these.
Cheetah, RavenMoonStone, artemis15sc---all false.
You don't know them.
However much you hear the facts.
But, you actually do
if you know them outside of YWS.
The chances are slim.
So---
I'll introduce myself.
Hey, I'm Unknown,
who are you?
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the poem is truly [ uhm... ] revealing. i like the flow , and u really are wise. hey will you answer to this personal question- are you really 9? you seem too matured for that.
for the part of the poem - its a mystery and i like your frank nature but i think as a stand alone work it is quite dull, perhaps a change in the middle lines and an imagery would crown it well...
nice to know you unknown
[BTW this is my real self]
Rituparna....
The poem, the words, the content, this is a good poem! I like when people write about whatever there is, not coating it.
Unless the coat was the purpose, ofcourse, if that makes sense.
Anyways, if I do have any commentary to make then it's going to be about the whole concept of knowing somebody.
Do we know people by knowing their names, addresses and schools they go to? I hardly believe so. People from my school hardly know me, and I barely know any of them. Now I know what they look like and their family names, but do I know what they're like?
How am I to describe their personalities if the farthest I've gone with them in a conversation is whether they like (Insert a teacher's name here) or not.
People we meet on the internet are more open about who they are, reading poetry and pieces someone reads can get us to know them much more than a conversation about the weather, don't you think?
Anyways, I really, really, really, enjoyed the piece. :3
Thank you for your praise! Much appreciated!
Wow this is really, okay. I think. Not too bad because it is about the unknown one. Hahahahaha! Quite lame jokes I make some times, and nobody gets it.......
Anyway, nice one though. Good rhymes, rhythm suits and thats all, i think, think, think, not maybe.
Nice choice of usernames from the young writers society.
Alright, alright i have to go now see you later goodbye so long.
~~Tay01, lover of Finding Nemo.
Thank you for saying something nice!
yeah.
I had a mean review once, but it was a joke. A cruel one, though.
really? Wow, that must be sad