I'm from rocking on toys for hours
From playing pretend
From stealing Christmas presents to climbing on couches.
I'm from wild hair
From dimples on my cheeks
From toothless smiles to almost-disappearing eyes.
I'm from amazing schools
From escaping the friend-zone
From meeting new teachers to making new friends.
I'm from crazy gifts
From playing piano at age five
From taking ballet lessons at age three to memorizing the Nutcracker march at age eight.
I'm from different schools
From seeing old friends
From weird talent shows to awesome teachers.
I'm from a love of writing
From Young Writers Society
From poems like these to talented stories.
I'm from life.
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Amazing poem! I've heard of the original Where I'm From poem by George Ella Lyon in my Creative Writing class (in which we had to write our own), but that wasn't until I was fifteen years old! I think it's wonderful that you wrote this at such a young age, and it's even more incredible that it is your first poem.
Here are some things I noticed from the original poem and others that I found useful in creating my own.
-The things you list as where you're 'from' don't always have to be objects or actions, but they can also be things like phrases that you commonly hear, or are called.
ex. "I'm from the know-it-alls and pass-it-ons, From perk up and pipe down" (Lyons)
-You can also describe things from your life that aren't necessarily a thing you can picture or see; explore the five senses and describe smells, tastes, and sounds you associate with your early childhood and present day.
ex. "From the scent of homemade biscuits filling up the kitchen"
ex. "From the high-pitched chirps of chalk on a blackboard" etc.
-Also, you can start two or three lines without using "I'm from," or "From," and simply describe the thing from the previous line, or add a new item to the list.
ex. "the Dutch elm,
whose long-gone limbs I remember
as if they were my own." (Lyons)
ex. "fried corn and strong coffee." (Lyons)
I recommend looking at George Ella Lyon's Where I'm From poem, and see how she uses these techniques! Other than that, I loved your poem, keep up the good work!
Hey, yo, Wisegirl22! Strangelove here on this PokeReview Day and I have a quick review for you!
A part of this truly amazes me, just shocks me. My mind is blown after reading this. I can't believe you're eight! I would honestly assume if you were 12 (I'm not saying that in offense, because I've seen 12 year olds write and this is up on that par). Am I calling you an amazing writer overall? Oh, no, but you are great for your age.
It makes me smile, reading some of these. It shows how proud a person can be of themselves. It's always nice to show emotion, especially when it's happy. Now, I don't mean to be harsh here, but I am going to be somewhat critical. I also liked the nice flow and stuff.
This, honestly, felt cliched. It just couldn't tack on. You tried to express your emotion through generic ways and, to me, just didn't work. I've seen many poems like this, and this felt awfully retreaded. Just, another poem run of the mill.
Overall, okay job.
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Okay/10
Okay job,
Keep writing,
Stay groovy, my friend.
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I really enjoyed reading this poem, it left me with a happy feeling. It was like a window into your life and the imagery as great as well. One of my favorite lines was: "Im fro wild hair from dimples on my cheeks from toothless smiles to almost-disappering eyes." I can totally picture the whole thing. Keep up the good work!
Thx!
Amazing poem! In the words that you have typed, it expresses what you are and where you are from and what you do. Not a lot of people are good at writing poems, but at your age, and the poems and stories you write, it's amazing. I would never think I could write like this at a young age. You have a lot going for you.
OMIGOSH, thanks!
You're welcome. Just, it's very impressive you can write stores and poems at a level like this. You inspire me.
Your welcome.
"I'm from life"...makes me realise of all the craziness i've been spilling all along over and over again, even today..makes me realise of all the sad brackets i have had over the years..makes me realise how happy i'm right now.. that's what it does! That one line! Beautiful poem with a dramatic ending and also the starting is refreshingly unusual. Kept it simple and neat. Not to be rude but if u could just find a way and break this sentence "From taking ballet lessons at age three to memorizing the Nutcracker at age eight" into two instead of one it would really do a great deal, poetic appeal-wise because as a reader i felt it kinda threw a little. But its really okay for a first timer i feel. Yeah! Besides that i a great four minutes time reading it. Yeah i read slow (if you must know). Hmm! I really wish i could show you a thumbs up but sadly i can't. Keep up.
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Very nice first work, wisegirl! I was afraid, when I clicked on this poem, that I'd get a boring backstory or a story of heritage or something but this was a great surprise!
Great job, keep writing, and WELCOME TO YWS!!
Well, nice poem you've got here m'dear! Let's begin, shall we?
No big nitpicks so we can just go straight into Content.
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I like how relatable you made a story about you; you're not the only one who has dimples, or has stolen Christmas presents or has taken ballet or piano (impressive by the way, do you still play? I've played since I was six). So no matter who you are, you can relate to this poem and no matter who you are when you grow up, you'll be able to look back at this poem and grin because you know it's all true.
I like the "wild hair," phrase (been there, done that) and I like the connection between starting ballet at three and memorizing a whole dance at eight. I like the last three lines about writing, but I'm not a huge fan of the very last sentence only because I feel like you ended a really great poem on kind of an anti-climactic line. I think you could've ended it better, but I can't think of any suggestions right now so that tells me it's not that big a deal anyway.
Great job on imagery and telling a story with very few words and overall, just the whole idea that you've written here is really great and kind of cute, actually!
Conclusion
I loved your poem, in short. I'm going to give it eight-and-a-half stars out of ten!
Thx!!! I really love you!
Why thank you!
Your welcs!
This doesn't suck. It's good. The poem is written about you and all the things that you've done. Your life sounds interesting. Memorizing the Nutcracker at eight and escaping the friend zone don't suck.
I've never seen something like this before. It's unique. I like the repetition of "I'm from and From." It gives the poem a certain feel.
Overall, this poem is great. Just a tip, don't hate bad work, read it and think of things you could do to make it better.
-M.P. Tigers
Oh, thx!
Sorry if this entire thing sucks, this is my first poem.