I cry for the people I love
and my tears fall--
not for myself
but for them.
.
I cry for the ones that are hurt
and my tears fall
in an attempt
to heal.
.
I cry for the ones that went off
and my tears fall
as I try to bring them back
onto the path.
.
I cry for the ones that deserve it
and my tears fall
until finally,
I can cry no more.
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Haiyaz.
I'm here to give you a review. I really like this poem and it is very relate able. I loved the way that you gave several stanzas listing reasons for why you cry. I also really enjoyed the way that at the end you stated how you couldn't cry anymore. I think you could add some commas in the stanzas, but you don't have to in order to make it better, just a suggestion. Overall it's a great poem and I really liked it. 
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Now your poem is pretty much simple and alright to me. It portrays reasons why
people cry. The message your conveying is not hidden but is spelt out clearly above about pains, worry, and sympathy that affect our life. Some of which we cry not for ourselves but for others and some of which we feel and are hurt.
I like the fact that your lines were kept at a steady pace. And that they were short and had a pattern. I also like the fact that your first stanza started with crying for the people you love and then went ascending to the ones that are hurt, then ones that went off probably to war and you finished the whole with the ones that deserve it. It was like you were building each stanza to a beautiful climax and then a perfect resolution.
Anyways keep t up love,
Cheers!