Published May 22, 2012
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It takes nothing to say these things to you,
Over all its good, but needs improving and possibly needs to be edited/re-writen.
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It takes nothing to sing these words to you,
They're just words,
Words that make sentences, that make promises to un-keep.
I'd much rather reveal myself in less recordable ways to cheat,
Cheat you out of the lies I know you'll tell,
Cheat me out of the pain you're trying to sell,
It's easy to say no when I look into your eyes.
They tell me how your soul hides,
Hides all the quiet whispers I hear in the night,
Across drunken pillows.
Keep still, I know you're awake.
Keep hidden, I know you're there.
Because there are things the heart hears in the night.
Turn out the light.