This isn't a goodbye letter, this isn't a regret

This was just absolutely amazing. A great piece to read.

Everything flowed nicely together and it tied off nicely at the end. I like your choice of words and the sense of imagery used.

"You left me in darkness' hands,
where the sidewalk ends.
I can't move, I can't breathe,
I'm just here, can't you see?
Your words have left me frozen,
left me alone and without a friend.
I don't know how I'll ever feel safe and warm again."

These lines were very relate-able. I believe many of the best pieces out there are one's people can relate to.

Once again, this was an amazing read. Nice write and well done.

Good job on this. I think you did very well in portraying the thoughts and feelings of the suicidal person. It also made me realize other thoughts of suicidal people that I never thought of! "I won't succumb to darkness, I'm looking for the light." I thought that was an amazing line.

Ummm, this poem had it's good and bad however; some good verses some just okay. There were a several stanzas where I felt you got off tempo and there were also rhymes that seemed a little bit forced. I'm not sure if you wanted a rhyme scheme or not because you have both-- the stanzas either had a rhyme scheme or it was free verse-- and perhaps that's what lead to the beat when reading it being unbalanced.

"Sleep well tonight, I won't.
Take care tomorrow, I won't.
Stay alive forever, I won't."

The repetitive "I won't" also lead to a weird, off-beat sort of situation. I would suggest taking out all of the I won't-s, and adding a last line of "Because I won't," or something like that.

"Sleep well tonight,
Take care tomorrow,
Stay alive forever,
Because I won't."

And lastly, you put "this is a goodbye" instead of the actual "this isn't a goodbye." Unless of course that the actual way you wanted it!

Overall though, good job! Keep on writing! Can't wait to read more of your work!