Ice Vs Fire

Hi and good job with the poem and spotlight. Any way this poem is intresting so first off, its a little hard for me to keep each other seperate, Try putting fire in top and ice in bottem or vise-versa.

"Once a peak, now a hole."

I didnt find this to be a big issue this is just me but how do you go from a peak to a hole? Just explain or re-write it if you want its not a big deal

"A mountain of fire, Painting the moon red, With the blood it has shed."

This part is a really good idea and a good form of visual writing.

those things and the fac its a little short are things to keep an eye out for any good job

Hey there,
Great job there! I loved the way your poem turned out. fire and ice huh! I know one more awesome guy -Robert frost who wrote a poem with the same title, but while he wrote about the way world would end on with fire or ice you wrote about well...fire and ice. Anyway I like your version better.
Great start! Incredibly ended and amazingly thought of!
Never quit writing,
Fangirl~

Hey felistia,

This isn't a review, just a comment, check this out Fire and Ice. It's another Fire and Ice poem done by Robert Frost. It's your competition for this name, so I thought you should see it.

Wow, this was really cool! And the picture that you put with it was really nice as well! The only complaint I have with this poem is that the third stanza in the fourth paragraph doesn't fit very well. The number of syllables is off in some places. I like to stick with the 'matching rule' (don't know if that's really the name for it) but it really helps me. You want to have the number of syllables match which makes the poem flow better and reduces choppiness but I myself don't follow it all the time. Anyway I liked it. People are just going to find fault in everything. Keep writing and never get discouraged!

~Keepwriting

Have a nice day!

I really love this. Although it is short (and I would prefer it to be longer) this is a good piece of poetry. I could see the fire melting the ice and the ice melting, which kills the fire. The imagry in this is amazing. The rhyming just adds to the whole thing, pretty much wraps it up with a pretty bow that says read me! I could see everything that you described. The only thing I could say to do is to make it longer, but only because I liked it so much I want to keep on reading. This is amazing. Keep on writing.

Damn, that picture tho :O (I could just stare at it for days...)

But about the actual poem, I really like it. It shows the contrast between the heat of fire and the coolness of ice, and somehow combines them together to form sort of a balance between nature. I also liked how you added rhyme to the whole poem. It adds to the flow. It's well-written and very descriptive and the whole thing just seems to...work. This isn't really a problem, but maybe make the piece longer? I feel you bring the readers into this world and then bring them out too quickly. But, I don't know, maybe you prefer it short. It's just my boat-ly opinion. Anyways, overall amazing writing and I hope to see more!

Trying not to Fall Overboard,
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