Young Writers Society

Heya! I've always been fond of poems about dreams because they're something I find really inspiring so I thought I'd take a look at this. Maybe you could make the title a little more unique though by adding another word like Phantom Dreams or Acrylic Dreams. I'm just picking at random as I've not read the poem yet but I think something extra would help draw more attention and distinguish this from other dream poems.

Specifics

1. You can cut some words out of that second line - always try to use as few padding words as possible in poetry so that the flow is smooth and every word has something behind it. I think you'd be better with:

Dreams are like portals
taking you to unknown places
with broomsticks and noseless enemies
[then maybe add some more filler here and start the rabbit holes line as a new stanza.]

2. The hints of popular literature are nicely woven in and they make me feel right at home.

3.

Sometimes they're gates,
pearly white gates that make you feel so happy
you're sad when you wake up.

I love it! It's a beatiful, surreal poem that evokes an airy image of dreams. Wonderful!

Hello there! racket here to review your poem!
Okay, well, I really like this, for multiple reasons. You've got Harry Potter and Percy Jackson references in there, which is by itself a huge asset, and then the theme itself is so relatable in that we've all had these dreams (I, personally, have had the Harry Potter and Percy Jackson ones ) I do have some suggestions though, if you will hear me out.
The first is your punctuation. You have a heck of a lot of periods here for a poem! These kind of chop it up and make it hard to read and understand. Commas are very beneficial in poetry, in that they help separate and point out different points in a way that does not disrupt the flow of the poem. I would suggest reading aloud your poem, and turning the periods that chop it all up into commas, or if you don't need a pause there, get rid of the punctuation in that spot altogether!
Another thing that I think could help your poem would be stanzas. There are pretty clear spots in your poem that deserve to be the end of a stanza, in that they change thought completely. Here's an example:

Defeating enemies without noses.

But they're also like rabbit holes

Hey there! I thought I'd drop a review on this nice little piece.

You've got a lot of good ideas here - some compelling images, and funny references to fandoms. Really, the main thing they need is a bit of organization.

Honestly, this would benefit from a bit of expansion, and perhaps being broken up into stanzas, because you seem to have two main phases going on here.

Phase I - The Fandom Phase
In my mind, this consists of this section:

Dreams are like portals.
They take you to unknown places.
Maybe someplace where you ride broomsticks
Defeating enemies without noses.
But they're also like rabbit holes
where strange things happen.
Where a god and a mortal can get together
and monsters only known as myths stand in your way.

Sometimes they're gates,
pearly white gates that make you feel so happy
you're sad when you wake up.
You can dream about other things, too--
sad events, funny ones, and everything in between.
But dreams--they're like snowflakes,
because none are ever the same.

You can dream about other things, too--
sad events, funny ones, and everything in between.

Hello Artemis! (Love the username!)

I'm Elinor, and I'm here to give you a review. Congratulations on writing this - poetry is really hard. I've always struggled with it myself. I found myself smiling at the Alice in Wonderland references especially, probably because I'm listening to music from that movie as I'm writing this, but that's beside the point.

I do like this, and I think you've picked a good subject matter to talk about. Dreams are so fascinating, aren't they? Sometimes they're simple and other times they make no sense. I think one thing this poem is missing is the scope that dreams can have. Right now it's kind of painted as "good dreams and bad dreams" but I think plenty of dreams can be weird, confusing and everything in between. For instance, in the past week I had a dream where I was trying to find the pieces to my Halloween costume and another where I found a job as a waitress and had to serve several of my classmates.

That would be my main suggestion for you. I would also maybe dig into a little more depth about the specifics of the content of the dreams - paint some pictures!

Good luck! Feel free to let me know if you have any questions.

Best,
Elinor