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  • The Little Mermaid (2023)

    Spoiler! :
    I haven't seen it and I'm not going to but lmao of course it makes more sense for a MERMAID WHO HAS A FISH TAIL AND CANNOT STAND UP STRAIGHT to steer a ship because we can't have the men doing anything heroic. Peter Pan and Wendy did this too, having John and Michael be captured instead of Tinkerbell and taking all of Peter's moments away from him and giving them to Wendy.

    Of course it can't be a romance with Eric anymore, they have to take pains to remove all aspects of that and clarify that she's in love with "the human world". But this is also in the original, so??

    Apparently there is a line about how she can't consent to a kiss when she can't speak? Excuse me Disney, I know being mute is really rare but if I was I would take offense to that. Ariel being mute for most of the film is a very powerful metaphor for anyone who's not been able to express how they feel to someone for one reason or another.

    I am really sick and tired of this brand of feminism that's really just misandry, and I do not stand for it. At Urban Outfitters the other day I saw something (I can't remember if it was a mug or a hat) that said "girls do everything better". no. Girls are humans too and capable to the same worst aspects of human nature. We should tell women's stories without tearing down men.

    In regards to romance, I also think we've overcorrected too far in the other direction. I always tell my students that the advice I'd give to my teenage self is not worry so much about boys to focus on school, my friends, and my extracurriculars, and if you've examined any of my work one of my favorite things to explore is our society's relationship with romance. BUT! That does not mean romance is bad! Peter Pan and Wendy did this too, by removing all of the romance out of the film.

    To quote Our Town: "People are meant to go through life two by two. It aint natural to be lonesome."

    It also took me forever to figure out that Scuttlebutt was a real song from the movie-- I was watching a video where they were playing it and I thought it was a rickroll.

    The fact this is probably going to be a box office bomb is heartening to me. People are sick of these movies. I've even been seeing a lot of normies saying the same things I'm saying now, about how they don't see a reason for this film to exist. No one I've talked to is really excited for this?

    The original is a beautiful film on so many levels, and it's one that I deeply connect to. Disney films are art. At their best, they make me believe that the world is a better place. And it's just really really sad to me to me what the company has become. They're so influential in my life and path to being a writer, but I cannot support them in their current state.

    Hopefully Snow White bombs even worse than this and they'll cancel the rest of these remakes. Maybe then we'll get back to whatever things were at before... they were on a good path with Tangled, Wreck it Ralph, Frozen, Moana.... but original stories and new classics for a new generation are not cool I guess.

    I'm grateful to have grown up when I did, in any case.

    But what I probably will do is watch the original The Little Mermaid and appreciate it even more.


  • What a dichotomy on my letterboxd profile.


  • I watched maybe 1-2 of illuminaughtii's videos before all of the drama came out. I don't remember what it was, but I specifically remembered marking "don't recommend this channel" because something about her rubbed me the wrong way.

    But yeah all the drama is crazy, and I feel bad for the guys that were unlucky enough to get caught up in her orbit. I'm not sure how people can be so manipulative and still sleep at night. It's also scary how much Blair reminds me of my mother, down to living in a pigsty at all (that's the part that gets to me! How do people live in filth like that?!)

    It's also scary how common YouTube drama like this seems to be. I'm sure glad I'm not a content creator, but I recently went through the channels I'm subscribed to and purged them. I just want to watch cool videos and not worry that the creator's going to turn out to be a literal psychopath.

    GengarIsBestBoy Its ironic how the youtubers that talk about internet drama are always the ones getting caught up in drama themselves
    May 22, 2023

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  • TFW you're browsing at Urban Outfitters, break a perfume bottle, and then are still too broke to afford anything on clearance.


  • Just finished reading my second book of 2023, Daisy Jones and the Six.

    I'm really trying to be a better reader and part of that is trying not to watch adaptations of things until I've read the source material. I also purposefully avoided any material about the show until I finished watching.

    Taylor Jenkins Reid seems like someone who I could really vibe with, considering she wrote a book about Old Hollywood and then the 1970s California rock scene.

    The book was... a lot and I was holding back tears by the end.

    I love Daisy, she's introduced as one thing on the surface (beautiful, glamorous California girl who throws away her privilege and talents to become a strung out rock star who wrecks her cars and hotel rooms out of carelessness and negligence) but it goes so much deeper than that with her character. It explores exactly why exactly she is the way that she is.

    I never realized Riley Keough was Elvis's granddaughter and now I can't unsee it, she has his face.

    Anyway, yeah! I really do need to read more but I think I'm still learning how to reclaim it as something to do for fun and not for school/work.

    winterwolf0100 I totally misread that as “just finished writing my second book of 2023” and was simultaneously incredibly impressed and also like “WHAT AM I DOING WITH MY LIFE” XD
    May 21, 2023

  • Oh no, no, no --

    I can't pretend I've ever followed the vlogbrothers too closely, but as a writer and reader coming up in the 2010s I feel like they've always been in my orbit. I feel like all of you can probably say the same. I have mixed feelings on John but I've always really liked Hank.

    It sounds like his prognosis is really good, but man, this sucks. Prayers that Hank gets the best possible treatment and recovers soon.

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    winterwolf0100 Oh my goodness :[[[
    May 19, 2023

  • I'm looking for beta readers for All Our Yesterdays! I think at this point in the process I need to take a step back from it and get fresh perspectives, but it's been really challenging to find people who will actually commit to reading a novel, even if it is on the shorter side at 34,000 words. The only people who I know that will actually read it are just going to offer praise and nothing else.

    In class I did some initial legwork into finding agents that I want to query, but I want to make sure it's as good as it can be before I do.

    Drama, Romance: An artistic free spirit inspires her boyfriend to make music and must grapple with her own sense of identity as he's propelled to stardom at the turn of the twenty-first century.

    Who is intereeested? 8D

    winterwolf0100 Oohhhh I’m tempted… but I’m worried to commit and not actually be able to follow through
    May 18, 2023

  • My grandparents are going to pay to get my car body fixed!!!!

    I figured I would ask because 1) I know they have the money and they usually just send money for birthday and Christmas anyway 2) The person I'm going to is not only lauded by seemingly everyone in the automotive community here, but good friends with my boss AND gave me by far the cheapest quote 3) I know this place books up far out and it was going to be last chance if I wanted to go to LA without a banged up car.

    And they said yes!!! I am literally just trying to wrap my head around the fact that I won't have to drive a banged up car for the first time in... literally ever (I sideswiped one side when I had my car for less than a month and the other side a short time later). Am I supposed to just have a car like this for life because I made some dumb mistakes in 2018 when I first had the car?

    My parents, true to form, have been guilt tripping me for asking my grandparents to cover such a hefty expense, but 1) I looked into financing it, and there doesn't seem to be any options 2) the only other option would be to get a new car, but I've only had this one for five years, and it should have another five years at least of life still, if not more, as it only has 80,000 miles. It's a great car that's given me literally no issues except when it broke down in January because the people who did my oil change messed up.

    You guys have no idea how much this car situation has been an albatross around my neck for the last five years, and how much of a weight off my shoulders it's going to be.

    Just to give you guys an idea, this is one side... the other side I didn't get good pictures of at the time. The second image is not my car but very very similar to what the other side looks like, only the scrapes extend for longer. There's damage on the front from my fender bender too, and on the sides.

    I was expecting to have to wait up to a month if not longer, but the body shop can get me in next week already.

    It's going to be a new start. ❤

    Spoiler! :

  • Tomorrow, and tomorrow, and tomorrow,
    Creeps in this petty pace from day to day,
    To the last syllable of recorded time;
    And all our yesterdays have lighted fools
    The way to dusty death. Out, out, brief candle!
    Life's but a walking shadow, a poor player,
    That struts and frets his hour upon the stage,
    And then is heard no more. It is a tale
    Told by an idiot, full of sound and fury,
    Signifying nothing.

  • Today, the universe decided to endow a burst of creative energy and I've... written almost 6000 words today, getting done almost all of the edits I wanted to do in All Our Yesterdays. I've been working since 9am and it's almost four. I just have to let it sit and uh... that's draft four?!

    WC: 34,058

    Have I ignored my paid freelancing work to do this? Yes-- but these creative bursts are so rare that I want to take advantage of them.

    But yes! How this story keeps shaping up has been just really really exciting for me.

  • Changing my pfp to one of the Peter Pan mermaids in protest of both Peter Pan & Wendy and The Little Mermaid remake <3

    And also because they're unapologetically sassy and catty and that's going to be a mood™ for my last few months in Wisconsin

  • The company I've been doing some non-fiction freelance writing for: There won't revisions for this latest assignment

    Also them, after I turn the assignment in: *send me revisions to do*

    I'm not upset, if anything it makes more sense, and they've been pretty good about keeping things to 1-2 passes so it doesn't take up too much more of my time without paying me any more.

    Still, I can't help but feel like I'm doing something wrong with how often they've been sending my work back-- there was some back and forth about the deadline yesterday and they were like "no rush, quality first".

    But at the same time maybe it's just my anxiety talking, because I don't know how anyone does a perfect first draft. I'd feel like revisions are just going to be a part of the process. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

    I also asked them about doing this more full time especially once I move and they said the project load depends on a lot of factors, but then a pay range if "all goes smoothly and consistently".

    The assignments themselves have been okay, the type of analytical nonfiction they have me do isn't really my speed but I can't complain because the pay is good and at least it's writing.

  • A little rant--

    I was always raised about etiquette in libraries - I've been at one for the past couple of hours getting some work done and it was nearly impossible to because 1) people were talking at normal voices, including one of the librarians 2) some children were running around screaming and neither their mother or the librarians did anything. This is on the heels of me being at Rent where my experience was nearly ruined because the audience was terrible. Not sure why it's so hard for people to have some semblance of etiquette in public places.

  • Based ChatGPT

    (I asked it: Can AI language models such as yourself ever replace writers?

    Its response was as follows)

    While AI language models like myself have shown remarkable abilities in generating text, it is unlikely that we will fully replace human writers any time soon. There are a few reasons for this:

    Creativity and Originality: AI language models are capable of generating text based on patterns and rules learned from vast amounts of data, but we still lack the ability to truly understand and innovate upon the human experience. We can generate text that sounds coherent and sophisticated, but it is unlikely that we will be able to produce truly original ideas or unique perspectives in the same way that human writers can.

    Emotional Connection: Human writers have the ability to connect with readers on a deep emotional level, by tapping into shared experiences, cultural references, and other factors that are deeply rooted in the human psyche. While AI language models can be programmed to produce emotionally charged language, the emotional impact of their writing is unlikely to match that of a human writer.

    Subjectivity: Writing is not just about producing words on a page, it is also about expressing a particular point of view, or telling a story in a way that resonates with the reader. This requires a level of subjectivity and nuance that is difficult to capture with an AI language model, which operates on a more objective and rule-based level.

    While AI language models like myself are certainly capable of generating text that is impressive in its own right, we are unlikely to fully replace human writers any time soon. Instead, we are more likely to be used as tools to assist human writers, helping them to generate ideas, refine their writing, and automate repetitive tasks, while leaving the creative work to the humans.

  • Part 2 of AI vs reality, The Castle edition.

    Spoiler! :
    FADE IN:


    Dorothy, a photographer, and Gavin, her love interest, walk along the banks of Loch Ness, taking in the stunning scenery.

    This place is amazing, Gavin! I can't believe we're really here!

    I'm glad you like it, Dorothy. Loch Ness is one of my favorite spots in Scotland.

    (Smiling back)
    I can see why. The water is so clear, and the mountains in the distance are breathtaking.

    They continue walking for a while, admiring the view. Dorothy takes out her camera and starts taking pictures of the scenery.

    (Watching her work)
    You're really talented, Dorothy. Your photographs are always so beautiful.

    Thank you, Gavin. That means a lot coming from you.

    I mean it. You have a real eye for capturing the essence of a place.

    Dorothy takes a few more photos before turning to Gavin.

    Hey, do you want to take a picture together?

    (Smiling back)
    Sure, why not?

    They pose for a few shots, laughing and joking around. Suddenly, Gavin turns to Dorothy, looking serious.

    Dorothy, there's something I need to tell you.

    (Sensing his seriousness)
    What is it, Gavin?

    (Taking a deep breath)
    I know we've only been seeing each other for a short time, but I feel like I've known you forever. I can't imagine my life without you in it, and I want to spend every moment I can with you.

    Dorothy looks at him, her heart racing.


    Dorothy, I love you. I know it's crazy, but I can't help how I feel. Will you be my girlfriend?

    Dorothy's face breaks into a wide smile as she throws her arms around Gavin.

    Yes, Gavin! I love you too!

    Gavin and Dorothy kiss passionately as the sun sets over Loch Ness.


    Spoiler! :
    Dorothy finds herself at the top of the hill, in the midst of the castle ruins, taking all of the pictures she can. For a moment, she puts her camera down, taking a moment to capture her surroundings.

    She looks, noticing Gavin has appeared beside her.

    You scared me.


    See the Loch Ness monster?

    Unfortunately not.

    He gestures to some of the ruins.

    Hey, can you take my picture?

    Do you have a camera? Or you want me to use mine?

    Yours. I left mine at the castle.

    Oh. How am I going to get the picture to you?

    Easy. You can mail it to me. I’ll make sure you get my address before we part ways.

    Alright. Stand where you want to stand.

    Dorothy readies her camera as Gavin poses. She takes a few. In some, Gavin is serious, in others he makes a silly pose.

    All right. I think I got some good ones.

    Do you want me to take your picture too?

    No, that’s okay.

    Oh, come on. You don’t want a picture at Loch Ness?

    Okay, sure.

    Dorothy hands Gavin her camera as she poses where he did. He takes a few pictures of her. That’s when she notices Sylvie a ways down the path, in the midst of an intense conversation with a WOMAN.

    Just a minute.

    Dorothy walks away from the ruins and towards Gavin.

    Those should be fine.

Ogres are like onions.
— Shrek