Young Writers Society

Hi, Gem! I'm back with another #RevMo review.

I really love the message of this poem. Force is a theme/thing that I don't usually think about, but your poem made me realize how negative its connotation usually is - and how it can actually be a good thing. Your word choice does a great job hinting at the negativity, while the actions described paint a more positive image.

not when you send yourself spiraling forward

Heyo! I bring a review to the table

I like this poem! The imagery is well written, the message is a good one, and I like the formatting. "Force isn't always bad..." honestly, I wouldn't have really thought of force as bad in the first place, but I think I can see how it could be. Forcing someone to do something they don't want to, forcing yourself deeper into sorrow or despair... those are some ways that force is a bad thing, now that I think about it. But your poem brings yet another perspective doesn't it? And it backs up that perspective with beautiful imagery and language and rhymes that seem effortless.

This poem almost seems like a painting as the lines flow into each other. Rhyming can be hard to execute well in a poem to make it seem natural, but I think you did it well here. The lines you write make me feel like I'm floating, if that makes any sense. I love when poems do that. When you feel like you can ride the words to infinity, soft letters washing over your legs and playing with your hair, lifting you off the ground, and you feel weightless, without anything to hold you back.... Your language did that to me. I read poems because of how they make me feel, and I felt a lot from just the beautiful structure of your lines.

This poem also has kind of a message, a moral. A good one, at that. Pushing yourself forward can lead to great things. Force is not always bad, if you use it the right way. It can give you strength, drive, grit. These two lines I feel like really spelled that out:

and you feel so tired you cant walk- cant think and you know you are on the brink

but wont let your ship sink

Hi LadyGemstone,
I'm here with a review. Just as with your last poems I like it. I must say that after reading the title I was expecting something else. Push and pull feels like two forces going against each other. From your poem, I feel like is one force going in one direction. I don't feel the contrast that I was expecting from the title.
I'd like to mention, again, punctuation. I wonțt repeat why as I already told you in my past reviews but I think that you should add it.
As for grammar, the only mistakes that I found were:
"force isnt always bad"
Isn't
"you feel like you cant breathe"
Can't
" tired you cant walk- cant think and you"
Here as well.
"but wont let your ship sink"
And won't. Is it a stylistic choice to write it this way?

I hope my review helped you,
MoonIris.