This is stellar work! Love the use of visual language to get the point across. You've also picked a theme that many readers can connect with; losing people, especially those we are close to, leaves a deep impression and you capture that feeling nicely. I think the one thing I will fault this on is your rhyming scheme, throughout the poem it is there but sometimes lines don't rhyme like the others which breaks the flow. Maybe I just missed something but I had it happen a few times. Overall, a solid work!
Points: 51
Reviews: 31
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