Young Writers Society

Hey, gem! Incoming review!

I haven't reviewed an acrostic poem yet, so now's the time. Let's get on with the review!

I'll start out with critique.

Y ellow like sulfur and poisonous to feat

V ariants of acid and razor icicles

Hello! I've came to review your poem! Lets get started

I really love this poem! I don't know much about acrostic poems so if I get something wrong I apologize! I really love how detailed this poem is for something as simple yet uncommon poem topic about a ice volcano! I adore the details of the volcano erupting and how you use the lava and ashes as a contrast to the ice and coldness! Its a really interesting thing to read and makes the whole poem only have more pizazz! I love these words you chose:

"Rage", "Razor Icicles", 'Poisonous to feat", etc.

These make the poem so detailed in its short existence and very fun to read and enjoy! I really loved this poem! Good job!!

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Wow! This is the first time I've read an acrostic poem that was actually meaningful and beautiful as well as just fun. I have a few comments - feel free to take what you find helpful and leave the rest.

First, there are a few places where there might be some grammatical/spelling errors. In the first stanza, you say "could it every be something it doesn't hurt to drink." Is that supposed to be "could it ever be something THAT doesn't hurt to drink" instead? In the third line, you write "poisonous to feat" and I'm assuming that's supposed to be "poisonous to feet." Minor, but just making sure everything is clear can help readers stay engaged with your message!

Second, the theme of an icy volcano is really poetic. However, I'm not seeing a clear connection between the first half of the poem and the ending. The transition to the theme of "no one cares to notice they loved you/Once" isn't quite clear to me. Maybe you could point to the ending somehow earlier on.

Anyway, good job! It's difficult to write a meaningful and cohesive acrostic, since you are confined with your language a little bit as you spell out the phrase. Excellent work and keep writing.