Hi there, Gem! To start off this review, I think I'll use one of my favorite memes:
I technically took summer classes in between the spring and fall semesters this year, but I recently started my sophomore year of college. This poem was very relatable. You perfectly capture the struggle of both wanting to do work you need to do and not wanting to physically do the work. I'm also a pretty big fan of the rhymes you used throughout the poem - even when they involved lentils.
These two lines in particular really caught my eye:
looking so very joyful, so very happy.
feeling so inadequate, so useless,
The juxtaposition between what can be observed and what is actually happening is great on its own, but mirroring the structure and language of the first line in the second made it even better. My one suggestion for that section would be to add "very" in front of "inadequate" and "useless" so it mirrors the first line even better, but that's honestly just a nitpick.
and it lights up my brain, and then i know
i've done nothing wrong,
and i should let the radio play.
I don't usually get all that emotional over poetry, but these three lines made me pause after I read them - it's a lesson I've been trying to tell myself for the past few months. There's nothing quite like that moment where I realize that I don't need to keep berating myself for having a slow day; I just need to enjoy what's going on around me. This was that moment in written form.
My one last comment is another nitpick. I noticed you used an apostrophe in the nothing wrong line, but you don't use them anyone else in the poem. Since there's other forms of punctuation and the apostrophe adds emphasis, I would suggest adding one in these lines:
isnt as fun as chilling to my favorite tunes.
until ive wasted a day.
Other than that, I don't have any more critiques for this poem! It's a great, powerful poem that really captures a single moment - even if it's supposed to span an entire day. I hope I see it on the front page soon!

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