L for Laugh,
L for Loki,
L for Lace,
L for Love,
L for Loyalty,
L for Light,
L for Life,
L for Luminous,
L for Lucky,
L for Learn,
L for Liberty,
L for Leader,
L for Limitless.
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On a serious note, though, this is beautiul. When I think of a word to describe someone, nothing comes out of my mouth wphat stars with L. Wonderfully and simpley written.
Lol this is beautiful. I was concerned for a second when the first line wasn’t Loki. My main criticism is mostly stylistic, but still important commas. Poetry follows no structure so technically you don’t have to do anything. However, they were random and distracting. Maybe work on flow? Also, maybe get into more detail about Loki since he’s a person. (He’s real in our hearts). Overall, it’s a cute poem that I’m sure isn’t serious. Creative and nice!
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HI ANNE!!! It is me!! I am stacking up my points!!!!
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first of, I want to say that this poem is WONDERFULL!!!!
I loved this!!!
I just want to say that all of them words are words that describe Loki.
You could have added more details, and added more depth. But other than that, I think that you did so well, I loved it!!
And when this part came off,
"October 23, 2018 Poetry: General, General 7 comments (2 reviews)
L for laugh,
L for lace
L for love," I thought of Loki, and Eris!!!
~B
Nice. I forgot that l stands for so many awesome things.
Thanks. Yeah L is a powerful letter, underappreciated if you ask me.
Hey, fam. Raven here for a review!
So I like this idea, but I feel like it could use a teensy bit more depth. Anyone can list attributes of a person and call it a poem, but what counts is the depth. What makes Loki all of these things? Why is he "luminous" and a "Leader"?
Another thing to think about is your rhythm and rhyme. Generally this format of poem is accompanied by rhyming or rhythm to give a bouncy or reverent feeling. Take a look at some of Shel Silverstein's poems; he writes things similar to this and is a master of the rhyme scheme. Using literary devices like that would greatly help your poem and would turn it into more than just a list praising Loki.
Thanks for reading this review, and I hope I could help.
Regards,
RavenLord
I wasn't applying these words to Loki i was listing L words that have had a positive influence on my life.
It is free verse.
And your welcome fam.
@RavenLord
L for Loki
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AHHHHHHHHHH!! YAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I dont like it.
ILLLOOOOOOOOVEEEEEEEEEE ITTTTTTT!!!!!!!
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I do! It is amazing, you did so well, it was so creative, I would not have been able to think of something like this....... I am in awe
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I clicked the little wonderful starthank you.Can not decide whether this is a very cryptic sonnet or a very creative acrostic - what do you call this form?
By the way - great variety of "L" words - but it would have added a humorous twist for some of the words not to begin with "L". That is my main feedback. And the punctuation was also scattered, though I like how you keep the Loki reference until the end. The title could be a bit more imaginative, as "Letter L" for me evokes grade school writing rather than poetic mystery.
never fear the poetry, just the poet
- metrophobia
Uh XD I call it the only form that looks right on my chrome book if you were talking about the commas I like them that why don't know why but they look nice like that to me thank you for the review.
I´m not sure what I´m doing, i´m new at this but it was very good!
Well, thank you and welcome.
What a wonderful, positive poem! (Perhaps I am biased because my name starts with L. Or maybe it is just the best letter!) In a world often full of sadness (and on a website full of sad stories and poems) this is such a lovely, refreshing change!
Thank you
This is nice!
Thank you