Warning: This work has been rated 16+.
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
139,216 Literary Works • 672,511 Reviews
Hi fatherfig I'm back again for another review on another wonderful poem you've written, so let's dive in again shall we.
*makes note not to tag you again*
*I don't no why I keep tagging the author I'm reviewing, like your going to get the notification anyway!*
This seams to be talking about burying someone in there own soil almost like cover them themselves without needing to dig them a hole, because the holes been put into the heart of the person who's speaking.
Little typo here not sure if this was on purpose or not: sorounding should be surrounding, if this was intentional though then just ignore me haha.
*me realizing what this is really about* what seemed to be perfect relationship ended in an amicable breakup but none the less hard to get past. <33
Love can be wonderful but it can also sting like a cut that suddenly burns when it's noticed but doesn't cause any pain until it's seen. <3
So that's it for me again, I hope I wasn't being to harsh and if I was I'm really sorry that was not my intention at all, this poem really showed lots of emotion and a lot of pain that needs to heal, I really hope your doing okay fig <33
Your poetry is always a master peace and a wonder to read!
I hope you have a wonderful day/night
@Dossereana Flying Over Vintage Writings & Spreading Love And Peace
thank you <333
hi fig! please excuse any typos during this review, i ak using my phone rn,,,
the death of something. you are spectating, surrounding someone, and yet they are no longer there for you. resounding, i love that idea.
"shatter the illusion" -- you are no longer there with them, sigh. such a powerful statement. missing is tenfold here, not being allowed to hold someone you love, glass no longer being able to mend!
i almost wish you put more anatomy into this, or more shatter-able things. i love the glass and hands, but i want more! more chalk! more poem! more everything! you are a strong poet, fig, dig deep and extend.
you make missing so strong here, i started tearing up, sigh. you know a poem's good when that happens.
best & sincerely,
herb.
thank you so much <3333