i don't need coffee to live
i don't need it to thrive
but at the end of yesterday
i needed it to survive
piles of work on my head
and chores and people too
it's always like that for me
i don't know about you
so yeah, when you disgrace
the taste
of coffee, I will spit in your face
and say don't bother me,
because you might be able
to get through all the hard feels
of the day without a mug at play
but me i'm not stable
to others dismay
without my coffee
the devil's on parade
i just get so stressed
and I feel the fade
as my little soul, shrivels away
i need this drink to keep my faith in humanity
to keep demons at bay, who drive me insane
and if you think, you can give me
decaf or tea, then you should turn
away, very quickly, because without
caffiene you're just left with me
and i'm a bull i'll charge you
if i need, dont give that crap to me
a mug for my life, a penny for
your thoughts, hah now i see
you finally connect the dots
i'm a mercenary and life is my target
i'll likely kill the hirer if i'm not
paid for it, coffee is jade
coffee is gold, now bartender
do as your told,
and get me another GLASS.
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Hello TypoWithoutCoffee.
Now your username has so much more meaning behind it! This poem almost feels like a tribute to the name you use on here so that we may better understand its origin.
I really liked your poem. I mean, I really liked your poem. Not just for the wittiness and smooth ease of your words like the gentle pour of coffee, but there was a lot of truth here that I could relate to. You were willing to be vulnerable and expose your innermost attitude towards the very thing that gives you the kick in the pants needed to take on life. Great work, and I hope to read more from you.
Thank you for sharing!
- Poetry Misfit
Haha thank you <3 the poem actually predates my username XD
Hello! Plume here, with a review!!
I really loved this piece. I'm not that big on coffee
please don't attack mebut this poem made me think twice. I think it probably captures reality for a lot of people, especially in the morning. I feel like this is probably what goes through everyone's head at Starbucks around 7 am every day.One thing I absolutely adored was you rhyming scheme. It had a slam poetry vibe to it, and I just know it would sound amazing performed out loud. I don't think my inner voice did it justice. You utilize similar sounds and slant rhymes so well that it creates this rap-like piece that has a really great effect. It's absolutely superb. Some of my favorite lines were "a mug for my life, a penny for your thoughts, hah now i see you finally connect the dots" and "because you might be able to get through all the hard feels of the day without a mug at play but me i'm not stable to others dismay." (Speaking of which, others should be other's. I'm not sure if the lack of apostrophe was intentional or if it was a poetic choice, but I thought I'd just point it out either way.)
I honestly don't have very many critiques. I genuinely really loved this poem, and don't have much more to say other than you're a very talented writer and I wish you a multitude of coffee in your future.
Once again, stupendous poem!! I can't wait to read more from you!!
Thank you <3
Oh I absolutely adore this (tho I may be biased as someone who also loves coffee). It's simple, light-hearted, and very fun to read!! Keep up the good work!!
I do wonder if you have a favorite kind of coffee? Like espresso drinks or just regular brewed coffee?
I ussually have home brew :> I love the smell.
Heyo! This poem almost made me say "Yes ma'am, I'll grab you a coffee ma'am!" like a silly, little robot XD! Anyhow,
This part of the poem made me understand how people have to get coffee in order to begin a new, stressful day in their lives. But sometimes too much coffee can harm you and I've learned that the hard way so every time I finish a cup of coffee I always drink water LOLOLOL!!!
THIS! THIS PART OF YOUR WORK REALLY MADE ME STRAIGHTEN MY BACK AND SAY THAT I SHOULD MAKE YOU COFFEE LMAO!!! Yet, a few spelling errors and I'm the type to really just get off of that T~T but overall, I'm loving it!
I should try to at least bring a few into attention, caffeine and possibly devil's on the parade lololol, I'm not that much of a coffee addict anymore since I've stopped and this reallhy reminds me of the time I would just flip everyone I see, off whenever I wouldn't have a glass of my coffee.
I ABSOLUTELY ADORE THE LAST LINE!!!!!!! "GLASS" in caps lock really sealed the deal oh my. Anyways, I loved your work and I'm looking forward to other of your future works!!
Love lots~~! <3!!
:> Thank you.
Of course! Anytime~!! <3
Hi QueenShadowGem!
OMG I really love this! I can totally relate to the whole coffee obsession. Coffee is life! I really like how the form of the poem just reflects a stream of consciousness and just a rambling idea and obsession of coffee. I think that it really suits the poem and the message. I also love all of the imagery and metaphors like "the devil's on parade". It makes the poem so much more vivid, so great job. I think the only suggestion I have would be to have a clear rhyme scheme because I noticed that there is some rhyme with the ending words but I couldn't find a consistent pattern and having that consistency might be nice but is totally optional. All in all, great job and I love the topic!
:> thank you
Oh dear! You can use this in a rap song
in Keanu Reeves' voice>_> Well seeing your unconditional love for coffee, you really needed to have a poem like this dedicated for it. <3<3 lol truth