Whoah.
This literally is exactly how I feel. Like, to a Tee.
Its crazy, I am finding so many poems that explain my situation EXACTLY.
I found that there were some gramatical errors here and there, like breaks in sentences and capitalization in different places. But at the same time, a lot of the commas kind of provide a sense of the person re-thinking over and over. I think what threw me off is that sometimes after the comma, the words are capitalized when they shouldn't be. Some lines fit with the commas even if they are improper, like the first two lines.
But I feel like these lines:
"How could I, let some boy have, this hold on me?
How could I, be so blind, but still see?"
Would be better as:
"How could I let some boy have, this hold on me?
How could I be, so blind, but still see?"
That's kind of the rhythm that I read it in my head. Even if, again, that comma placement is also kind of improper. The commas themselves. Just as a reader I felt like this flow worked even if its different from the first two lines.
But other than that, I really like this poem.
I'm not even kidding, this is exactly how I feel about a certain someone. At least, it was, until I had enough and decided to leave. It's crazy to see so many people in my situation, thinking exactly like how I feel. I guess I know I'm not crazy.
The person is so immature, so rude, and can say things which such insensitivity that they're hurtful. And yet somehow, we see them as strong, smart, capable. We see something in them that they don't see. And yet we wonder if our puppy love is just making us blind. How can they be so selfish and immature, yet still somehow have us smitten? It truly feels like you are on strings when you are waiting for someone like this. And its crazy because it just won't get to their head.
I seriously love this poem. If there was a love button, I would click it.
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