Hi. this is kman134. i'm here to review.
First off, this is pretty good. the emotional and symbolic representation of the ocean was brilliantly pieced together.
"i am drowning in an ocean salted by my tears.
the overpowering waves beat me closer to shore and my feet
can almost touch the sandy bottom but--
i am washed out again."
this was my favorite part. i don't know why, but the first part is always the best. there was so much emotional energy in it. it had such a somber feel in each sentence.
"the handsome lifeguard in the 90's movies we used to watch,
who stands on the shore and looks out onto the ocean
but doesn't see a thing."
the obvious reference to Baywatch was also put in vividly, showing the romanticism of beach life, but the reality of it is much too disturbing.
Anyways, this is pretty good. i hope to read more.
Points: 60
Reviews: 200
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