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An Ode to Mother Nature

by TheRebel2007


I'm thinking that the winking
Sun of the Laws of Physics
Has led to the rise in 
Occurrences of solar eclipse,
And that has made Man blind
Of his own wrongdoings;
But Nature is kind
For, if it wouldn't have, we wouldn't 
Have time to survive
Now, it's our turn to
Make Nature's trust revive.

O Nature, Nature, Nature, please forgive us,
I have conscience, that's why I'm making this fuss,
We do know, during our birth -- you were our nurse,
Oh, I know, we are being a hostile curse.
Betrayal - that's the thing we've done to you;
But there are people who know what's next in the queue --
Gone the old days, this's the age of Generation New
Who know they have few years - very, very few
To stop the greatest apocalypse coming to Mankind;
They have got the years because Nature is kind.

This wouldn't have even happened if We we sincere;
We are the only to make this noble world steer
Away, away, far from the clasp of Destruction
Which may happen due to the ever-increasing pollution
And due to the 'noble' Climate Change
By which Nature is taking its Revenge.

It’s happening fast whether you believe it or not;
The Earth may soon become as hot as a teapot
But the ‘Leaders’ are still asleep on their deluxe cot;
And, Nature’s going to show how much power it’s truly got.

Nature has given us billions of wake-up calls,
But we had had no intention to make pollution stall,
Nor Climate Change, neither Global Warming --
Because, we didn’t pay heed to Our Mother’s warnings.

I am wondering that if Relativity
Could show a little more Creativity,
Dimple time a little more,
So that we score the highest score;
And within the time, we’ll cast a spell
On the planet in which we dwell --
We shall overcome this obstacle,
If we can do it, it’ll be a Miracle!
It’s time for a Revolution!
Let us try to find a Solution!


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Hello rebel! Nicole here with a short review.

First impressions: this was a great poem! I really agree with the topic, and I think you presented it in a great way. I liked the way you made it rhyme, and made it flow pretty well.

Things you could improve: Nothing big here. You might want to add in some line breaks though. I think this would really help the impact this poem has, and help the reader understand what you are saying.

Really loved this poem!

Keep writing!

-Nicole




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Hi there, Ellie-Mae here for a quick review!

Wishing you a happy day/evening/morning/night/whatever is applicable to your part of the world! First off, please remember that my reviews are my own opinions :) I’ll give honest feedback, but nothing at all is intended to hurt or discourage you in any way at all! <3 So, without waiting any longer, let’s get right into it and digest the spectabulous piece of literary work!

First off, I loved the rhyming! That aspect made it a lot more enjoyable to read :) good job with that!

In my opinion, I would try and add some larger words that are more descriptive- rather than words like “hot” “revenge” etc :) but I do love the simplistically beautiful aspect of this ode… so it’s honestly AMAZONG either way!

I really enjoyed :)

Ellie-Mae





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