Young Writers Society

Hi! I'm here for a quick review.

Wow! This was an amazing bit of poetry. So funny and 'nonsensical', but it somehow made sense to me (maybe that's just me being weird). It reminded me of this poem 'Mish Mash' I read a long while back, I don't remember who wrote it.
Now, on to the review.

Glows:

I really loved the way you've merged the words. They sound like they are actual words (no offence. Of course, they're your words)

I'm just going to focus on a few parts I loved most:

Horror was teeth and feather.

All this doesn't make quite sense -
But, I have, for my defence,
If it, to you, really did do offence -
Why did you read this? It's named 'Nonsense.'

Then an elephant met a seal -
Confused was the 'elepheal';
'Cause when land and water deal,
They always leave unpaid the bill.

Finally came turtle and dog -
They looked like a strange log;
And the fantabulous 'turtog'
Traded spices in cogs.

Hi there, Ellie-Mae here for a quick review!

Wishing you a happy day/evening/morning/night/whatever is applicable to your part of the world! First off, please remember that my reviews are my own opinions I’ll give honest feedback, but nothing at all is intended to hurt or discourage you in any way at all! <3 So, without waiting any longer, let’s get right into it and digest the spectabulous piece of literary work!

I really love this! it is so sweet and really really gives me wholesome feelings for some reasons. I love animals, so it made me smile and I read it. the last two parts bring it all together!

"And then they all told each other
That they would rather
Hold in the sea, the rudder
Than become a hatter.

All this doesn't make quite sense -
But, I have, for my defence,
If it, to you, really did do offence -
Why did you read this? It's named 'Nonsense.'"

Ellie-Mae

This poem is very adorable! I loved the Dr. Seuss vibes it gave me. i will say the rhythm is kind of off. I think it would be good to adjust some syllables to give it a better flow. But other than that, I really enjoyed the poem! I love the different names you came up with for the fusions of animals as well. I have to wonder if there is a little more to this poem than meets the eye, but I couldn't decide on it for sure. Maybe some form of theme or symbolism disguised as nonsense. Or maybe there's nothing to it other than pure joy. Either way, I enjoyed it a lot and I hope to see more poems from you on here! -Avery

Hello Hikari here with a review!

Honestly the title didn't prepare me at all for this poem, its fun and silly and weird and I love it!

{And then came shark to parrot -
Thus they merged together
To form the species 'sharrot'
Horror was teeth and feather.}

I think this was my favorite line! But the whole poem was awesome! Kudos ❤

Hi there, Rebel!

I enjoyed reading this poem of yours. It’s rare nowadays to find poetry that’s written purely for delight, and to me this was one of them. It’s “Nonsense”, but it serves a function. I like the little fantastical world you built up, where animals can become merged together and react differently to their new condition. The idea that the ‘lionine’ would now have to go register themselves (as a new citizen?) made me chuckle.

Horror was teeth and feather.

Then an elephant met a seal -
Confused was the 'elepheal';

And the fantabulous 'turtog'
Traded spices in cogs.

Hi,
I do not know if I am in a position to review since I myself am learning. But one thing I can say is that this poem is so different from what we often come across or read. It takes us into a world that is biologically impossible and yet finds a way into our fantasies. And this topsy- turvy kinda world is just fascinating to me personally because I love fiction. All the best for your future writings!

Regards
Pragya

Hey TheRebel2007,

What an awesome idea for a poem! I love it! It's a super creative and 'out of the box' kind of idea. It reminded me of Doctor Seuss because of the fun and made-up names of all the fun and made-up animals! Someone should draw them! Hahahaha! The last part is defiantly the best part as it adds some more spice to the whole poem by contradiction. what I mean by this is that you made the poem more interesting and memorable for the reader because most writers would want people to read their work. By saying "Why did you read this? It's named 'Nonsense.'" you made this poem more memorable because, as I said before, most writers would want people to read their poem, story or novel. This, oddly, makes it more memorable because it is uncommon. I hope that makes sense. Overall you did an amazing job at engaging the reader and making this poem unforgettable. Thank you for writing such a fun poem to take us all back to the good old memories of childhood! Have an awesome day, night, morning or evening!