Hi! I'm here for a quick review.
Wow! This was an amazing bit of poetry. So funny and 'nonsensical', but it somehow made sense to me (maybe that's just me being weird). It reminded me of this poem 'Mish Mash' I read a long while back, I don't remember who wrote it.
Now, on to the review.
I really loved the way you've merged the words. They sound like they are actual words (no offence. Of course, they're your words)
I'm just going to focus on a few parts I loved most:
Horror was teeth and feather.
That was a really good line. To me, it has two meanings: • They were completely different animals (sky, sea...) • Shark attacks were now combined with bright green feathers. (Come to think of it, that would actually be scary)
All this doesn't make quite sense -
But, I have, for my defence,
If it, to you, really did do offence -
Why did you read this? It's named 'Nonsense.'
Now THAT is what I call an amazing ending. It was just so unexpected and funny. The commas and punctuation really give that rhythmic feel, which I think is amazing.
This poem was really good, but I found some parts which could be improved on. Take what you want, leave the rest!
Then an elephant met a seal -
Confused was the 'elepheal';
'Cause when land and water deal,
They always leave unpaid the bill.
In this stanza, I think the last line doesn't really rhyme. I noticed that you have an alternating rhyme scheme of ABAB and AAAA, and this feels a little weird. You could try replacing the last two lines with something like "The biggest problem was their meal, ele wanted grass and eal wanted eel"
Finally came turtle and dog -
They looked like a strange log;
And the fantabulous 'turtog'
Traded spices in cogs.
The last line seems a little too ridiculous to me, like something I would put just for it to rhyme. You could try putting something making a little more sense. But again, the poem is called 'Nonsense' for a reason, so you can leave that there.
Overall, I think this was an amazing, very funny poem.
That's all I have for you right now. Hope my review was helpful, have a great (whatever time of the day it is)!