In the multitudes of different perspectives, I see
Thousands of millions of sorrows and ecstasy
Dancing amidst the chaos of youth and exuberance
In this little world of ours, the sangam and confluence.
I see ideas sparkle, I see anxiety chime,
I see classmates and friends become partners in crime,
The lights above me scintillate in the blackboards' reflections,
Space and time all bow down to shouts and celebrations.
Celebration of experiences, ideas, and life itself,
Picking up sand and dust from dunes, shores, and shelfs,
Sieving wisdom from granules weathered by the sun --
Knowledge is one, boundaries are none, and life... is fun!
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Hia rebel. Thanks for the review already but it is review day (and you know I am so so slow in responding) so have my gratitude with this XD (I would have read this anyway~)
I like the simplicity here!Btw I find it rly sweet that you wrote poems abt your friends. Reminds me of how I used to write STORIES for my friends (but they all inevitably crumbled under my own ambition and my inability to write short things)
Anyway, the poem. This poem.
I really like the rhyme in the first 2 lines. I already see that the big words will be too difficult for my midnight brain but I love the rhythm and how easy it reads thanks to it (even if I am not sure what a sangam is and the search engine would be in a whole new tab!)
Tho I kinda feel like the next verse makes this sound a bit like a Christmas poem. I can imagine Ghost Writer from Danny Phantom reading this out while forcing everyone to rhyme in the Christmas episode (Idk why I am on a DP trip, I had a reference to the series in my JacobMoore review too @.@)
Okay I just, thanks to the blackboards remembered the name of the poem. Oh my. Ohhh that makes everything so much better (don’t ask what I thought was happening in the poem before because I can no longer tell you). I love that this reflects class room life. The different perspecives of all the students and how they perceive the Lernstoff and how tests or just the difficulty (or ease?) of learning can create big emotions. And that ofc most students are young XD (Can’t be all me, going to uni for the first time at 25! And we had a gal in class who was 45!)
I also like the idea of celebration in the class room. Sounds like celebrating the progress and success of the students.
Aww that put me in a cheery mood after some more haunting experiences recently <3
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This was a really fun read. It really paints a picture of what college is like as a positive social environment and also, just a really good use of vocabulary.
Hello! As a recent college grad going back for my master's, I'm always interested in hearing about other people's college experiences. Everyone has different experiences, but I feel like you touched on universal themes:
I know I've experienced both emotions with a (un)healthy dose of panic on multiple occasions XD
I'm not sure what sangam means (or what language it comes from), but based on the context of the stanza, I think it's relating to all these students coming together in this common experience.
There is good imagery here, but I'm a little confused as to how sand and dust can be compared to gaining knowledge. The average person wouldn't necessarily be interested in granules or other types of soils. Maybe choosing something like shells or sea stones could be a more effective symbolism to convey.
Lovely way to end the poem! It's relatable and uplifting. Great poem!
WOW this is great! I can't understand half the word you said (I've Googled it later) but the context clues you gave made me understand them a little. As an incoming college student, I was worried about going to college, will it be hard or not? I don't know, but maybe there's something to look forward to. Also I likee the rhymes, it's like music to my ears. My only issue is the rhythm? or was it meter? I counted the syllables and they're pretty close to eachother but the lines still seems clunky (or maybe it's just me? Hmm 🤔
Hey there, thanks for your review!
College experience can be different for everyone, but the new experiences can be fun -- coming from a fellow university beginner. About the rhythm, it's more of a flowing metre instead of a static one and I think you should try to recite it out loud to know how it sounds.
Thanks again! 😁