[Opening]
I’ve set free all the stars I stole,
The sky, once halved, is now ‘gain whole -
The crimson moon gazes ‘pon my soul;
I am a heartless man.
Limb ‘pon limb razed behind,
I used to be the merciless kind -
Now I’m but a bookless bind,
I am a heartless man.
The oceans I’ve part apart,
The suns I’ve carried in my cart -
All sneer on me and my cavity d’heart,
For I am a heartless man.
[Rap bridge]
The worlds I burned, the rivers I drank,
The weapons I ate, all nukes and tanks,
All smirk by me as they glare ‘me blank;
The caverns I dug, now slimy and dank,
The continents ruptured mock me in ranks,
As all the ‘sorry’s, ‘welcome’s, ‘love you’s and ‘thanks’ -
Swirl by me on the ship that I sank!
[Bridge]
I - loved her but I forgot
To love - myself with all I’ve got;
[Chorus]
I gave it my all, I gave her my heart,
She gave me hers, but alas - at last -
She took hers back and left me behind
Without my heart - no matter what I tried!
No matter what I
tried!
No matter what I tried!
No matter what I tried!
No matter what I tried!
No matter what I tried!
[Sorrowful bridge]
And now, amidst the ruins and what’s left behind
I weep, I weep, I weep, I weep,
I weep… and gather… all the poems I could find -
The Rhythm of my melody, the Lovie who was once mine…
[Sorrowful chorus]
Now I stand and sing… mute -
For my heart’s with her and I can’t get it back,
For she’s gorgeous and pretty and adorably cute,
For I am a heartless man…
[High pitched chorus]
No matter what I tried!
No matter what I tried!
No matter what I tried!
No matter what I tried!
No matter what I tried!
I tried a lot, but I can't really sing - so, after 15-20 prompts across multiple accounts I managed to generate an AI song that lies 99% with my vision for the melody, I hope you like it - even though it's made by machine, not man: The Song: Heartless
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As a person who writes Songs of her own, this is spectacular. The repetition of the lyric "No matter what I tried!" is truly heartbreaking. I especially love the sorrowful bridge, as I could physically feel the emotion while reading, honestly, I almost started weeping too. I will go listen to the generated Song now, even though I am not usually a fan of ai generated music, since it can never compare. I am however an amateur musician, so if you are interested, we could do a musical collab on this (I know that this is a weird offer).
Hey, thanks for the offer! I would like to take you up on that if you want, send me a Discord ID or Instagram ID in a private message and we could get started like today
Oooo. So, we have some song lyrics on here. This site has everything, I swear.
I think that this were very interesting song lyrics. At first, I thought it was a man talking about war with the mentions of tanks and weapons, but the chorus told a different story. I think this would make a nice song if it were to be turned into a song. Overall, I couldn't really find anything to critique. These were good lyrics with an interesting story in them. Maybe you could add a few more rhymes in it, but the lyrics are still good without it.
Keep up the good work!
Thanks for the review, SavageRaptor! Actually, there's a song I created using Autotune and AI instrumentals. If you wanna, you can check it out:
https://youtube.com/shorts/0DINJMlUDIM? ... zSfhez-uMo