These tears are not for you.
They aren’t my sign of weakness.
These tears aren’t even for myself.
You see them, these small tear drops,
but you don’t see what is behind them.
You ask me what the reason is-
for why these tears escape my eyes.
It shows me that you
wouldn’t understand why.
I cry because I have been strong
for far too long, so no longer can I be.
I put on a straight face for those around me.
But yet you still don’t see,
not will you ever see.
My tears, small as they are,
hold a million seconds
of raw, powerful emotions
that I have been holding back.
I am strong,
but even for me-
I have been strong for far too long.
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Hey Green
You should consider working more with the idea that the tears aren't strength. You seem to have multiple ideas in this poem that are all colliding into one.
Speaking from the Narrator's point of view,
1: Tears aren't for me, or you, but just are.
2: Tears are not a sign of weakness
3: I cannot constantly be strong
4: I am alone
Overall I'd say maybe a poem could work with one overall idea, and have these other things echoing beneath it, supporting it, or arguing against it, but in this poem they all seem to be on equal footing.
If you restructured the poem by rewriting it with your main idea and then points that support your main idea, you might end up with a better result.
Point: Tears just are
Supporting point
A - They aren't for you
Example with imagery
B - They aren't for me
Example with imagery
C - They aren't a sign of weakness
Example of strength
D - They are from an over-stimulated sympathetic nervous system
Explain how shutting down flight of fight is not a sign of weakness
Personally I'd say 'I am alone' doesn't belong in this poem. It's something that makes the poem immature and while a lot of teenagers and young adults could relate to the statement, it is going to get the poem looked down on.
Hey,
I like this. the poem is nice, and makes sense too me until this part;
" But yet you still don’t see,
not will you ever see."
> It was kind of rocky, and messed up the flow a little.
Other than that, I don't see anything that doesn't fit, or looks messed up. Good job, overall!
Keep writing, and have fun!:)
_Britt_
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I probably would have found this poem even if you hadn't pointed it out to me. I usually get to all of your poems.
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Faving time and STYLE!
So I really love the idea of this poem, and how you write it out. One of my friends on YWS is constantly telling me that people show their emotions way too little. If you are sad, be sad! If you are crying inside, then show it! Everybody puts on a front of being tough and happy on the outside, while being an emotional wreck on the inside, needing help. How can people know that someone needs help if it isn't apparent?
This read like a letter to me... A letter to someone you love. And the way you write it is beautifully sad. A piece of art, really. I love this piece a lot. While it doesn't contain a lot of vivid imagery since there is no scene or person to describe, I still felt a lot inside. I felt sad along with you. I felt like reaching out to hold you up while you cried.
My favorite part would have to be...
Just let it out, Tulip! Someone will understand, if this person doesn't.
~Timmyjake
I love this! I have felt this way many a time, and you capture it beautifully. I like the freestyle of your poem and the way it flows. I think it's very potent and it touched me, which doesn't happen very often. Basically, I think it's great!
There were two tiny things I noticed, however. One is your title--"to" should be "too." The other is in the fourth to last stanza, which reads
"I cry because I have been strong-
for far too long, so no longer can I.
I put on a straight face for those around me."
First, get rid of the hyphen after strong. It doesn't need the interruption. Second, add "be" after "so no longer can I." With out that, it makes no sense! But other than that, this was a great poem. I'm impressed!