Hello there, GreenTulip!
This is Moonwatcher here for a review! ^-^
(please be considerate and ignore any typos you may find, i'm on mobile and writing a mobile review is extremely difficult)
Very pretty title, love that emoji heart.
First thing is something very minor:
Where are you,
When I need you the most.
Again, small thing, but it bothers me that there's a period instead of a question mark, haha.
Give me a reason to protect.
I feel as if this line is very indirect. Protect what, what is there that needs to be protected?
Never leave me be troubled alone,
I am not good handling me demons.
I think you meant *let in the first line. As for the second line, I think you meant *my, not me, haha.
I feel that this poem is very repetetive when it comes to the aspects of love. Constantly throwing around love, over, and over again. I feel as if you're doing a lot of telling, but not enough showing. I'd go more in depth with your emotions, and add some imagery, which this poem seems to lack a lot of. Show the reader your emotions and feelings, and show them the power of your voice by using imagery.
The poem seems extremely choppy, and I'd suggest to try organizing your thoughts together a little better.
That's all I have to say about your poem; it certainly has potential. I hope my review helped you out, and have a great day! ^-^
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