Emerald and Zoltar moved silently through the undergrowth. Strange sounds filled the air as the day wore on. Mist started to float through the forest, twisting and winding around the trees like serpents. The light filtering though the canopy started to fade as the sun sank further and further down the sky. The shadows grow longer, creeping along the ground like the ominous feeling sliding along Zoltar’s scales.
“How far are we from your village?” Zoltar said, looking at Emerald, who was walking next to him. Her ears twitched with every sound and her tail was lashing from side to side ready to whip anything that dared to attack them.
“It's only about half an hours walk away. I'll help you back to your cave tomorrow,” Emerald replied, scanning the forest for signs of movement.
Zoltar swore that he saw slender shapes darting from shadow to shadow, following them as they crept through trees. They never came close enough for him to see what they were, but they were always there, watching and waiting.
“We’re nearly there,” Emerald whispered, scanning the canopy above them.
Zoltar followed Emerald’s gaze and his eyes fell on a long wooden bridge. Green shafts of light shone through the trees leafy branches, lighting up the moss and brightly coloured fungi on the bridge. The walk way was hoisted about nine dragons high in the trees and was two dragons wide. It looked old and had wooden planks missing in parts.
“When we get to the village let me do the talking. Not a word okay. If the Wisp Talon’s catch on that you’re an outsider it’ll be bye, bye, you.” Emerald warned as they carried on under the bridge.
“But how am I going to even get into the village without them noticing me. I can’t change color and I have way more horns than you?” Zoltar’s gut felt like someone was tying it in knots.
“That’s where I come in. I can alter my frill to look like your horns and I’m just going to change my scales to match yours. The Wisp Talons don’t know what Shadow Talons look like. We haven’t be off this island for more than one hundred years. They’ll just think that we’re a…couple,” Emerald scales turned bright red and she ducked her head.
Zoltar smiled in amusement, “Okay then. It seems you have a plan.”
They carried on silently for a few minutes. The sky had faded from turquoise to a dark cobalt and the birds were singing their last song for the day. Their shrill notes echoed through misty air. Crickets were starting play their chorus of squeaks and chirps.
“You know we’re going to have to leave the island as soon as possible after this?” Emerald said suddenly, breaking the silence.
Zoltar nodded. He was still a little worried about entering the Wisp Talon village. What if there were Fangtar’s there? Surely they’d recognize a Shadow Talon?
“Sometime tomorrow morning would be best,” Emerald carried on, “We probably don’t even need to take you back to the cave. We could just fly straight to the maze. It would definitely be safer to do that.”
Suddenly Zoltar remembered Felistia and Shiraku. He couldn’t just leave them like that.
“Wait, Emerald. I would really prefer if we did stop by the cave. I…have to take care of a few issues.”
Emerald looked him slyly, “Oh? And what sort of issues do you have to take care of?”
Zoltar sighed. He should have known she wasn’t going to let him off so easily.
“I have some friends. I met them on the island,” Zoltar wasn’t too sure how much he should let on. It was Felistia’s cave. She might not want Emerald knowing where it was or who was in it.
“Mmm hmm,” Emerald arched the crests above her eyes.
“I was going to ask them if they wanted to come along,” Zoltar looked Emerald optimistically, “You wouldn’t mind if they came along, would you?”
Emerald rolled her eyes and smiled, “Okay, fine. It’s probably better for them to get off the island anyway since the Fangtar will be looking for outsiders more than ever.”
Zoltar beamed, “Thanks Emerald.”
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Hi felistia! Happy review day! ^-^
Sorry if this review is short - the chapter is a bit shorter this time!
I'm really excited for them to get to the Wisp Talon village - I can't wait until they meet them. Also, those "things" darting back and forth in the background? Yep, definitely bad stuff.
I'm a bit confused about Emerald's disguise -- am I missing something? I don't really get how turning to look like Zoltar will help anything. Are they supposed to go in there and hope that both of them will be unrecognizable? I'm not quite sure. Just a sentence or two could really clear it up, maybe (though I suppose if I read until they get to the village I could find out, haha).
I can't quite remember if Zoltar actually mentioned getting the other items to Emerald. I feel like he may have, but it's a bit foggy, but in case he hasn't he really should! It's also a way to get more information in about the items. I know if he did tell her about them it was very brief, so explaining them a bit more to her would help the readers too.
I'm loving Emerald's powers, though. Changing her scales like that is really cool and I'm sure it will come in handy for their adventure. She's also a great character and I can tell she and Zoltar are going to have some sort of relationship. Also a bit nervous as to how Shiraku and Felistia are gonna react when Zoltar brings her back, but I guess we'll just see!
~EternalRain
Time for another review.
This is a bit of a short chapter, so I don't think I have as much to say about it as previous chapters.
I feel like I'm missing a part where they looked at the tablet and found out what object they need to find on the island. After all, they really can't leave until they've found it - it would be rather pointless. And I would have thought Zoltar would have read the tablet immediately.
Ooooh, foreshadowing. xD These are probably the Fangtars, aren't they? And they're probably going to like kill half the village once they find out Zoltar's inside. I guess we'll see.
How big is this tribe? Because really, shouldn't they recognize Emerald? If the tribe is big enough that they can wander in and not expect to encounter anyone who knows Emerald, they probably should have been able to overpower the Fangtars a long time ago through brute force. I also found it surprising that the Wisp Talons can alter their appearance that much, but I really like the idea that they use it to match their sweethearts - it's just a really cute idea.
The other odd thing I noticed is that Emerald talks about flying back to the maze and off the island, but the whole reason they're staying the night is because Zoltar can't fly because of his wings. How is he going to be healed enough to fly by tomorrow? Unless they have some kind of healing magic, I would think they'd only be able to use herbs and stuff, and it would take at least a few days.
Something I forgot to mention in the last review - is it the Fangtar or the Fangtars when referring to the group as a whole? You're a little inconsistent on that aspect.
I like Emerald. Not as much as Felistia, because her personality isn't quite as distinct, but I do like her. I also like how you use a dragon's length as a measurement.
And that's all I've got!
Thank you so much for the last two review. Sorry I haven't replied sooner. I've been very busy. I'll get to editing out the problems as soon as I can.
Hey! Squirtlepowiee here for another review! Today, I will make a very short one.

“The shadows grow longer, creeping along the ground like the ominous feeling sliding along Zoltar’s scales.” Previously you were writing in past tense, but somehow, in this sentence you switched to present. Try to stay constant. Keep it in present or past, but stick to one.
“It's only about half an hours walk away.” Hours should be hour.
“Zoltar’s gut felt like someone was tying it in knots.” I think “tying it into knots” sounds a bit less funky.
That’s all the mistakes I would like to point out. The others are just a matter of opinion, so that’s not important xD Keep writing!
~Greetings from Squirtlepowiee