Hello, Thisislegacy! Ruby here from team Vader's Raiders to review your poem here!
First I must say, I'm so sorry to hear some of the contents of this work. It hit me like a brick to the face. Not only is it sad that you were/are treated badly, but that you emotionally had no one to fall back on. This piece isn't just a good one because of the rhyme scheme ect. but because it's very real to you, and to anyone experiencing things similar to this.
Although I feel bad about critiquing something so close to heart I believe this line could be better written
This barely covers anything, but you will stay unconvinced.
Because almost all the rest of the poem rhymes, I think it'd be good to end with another solid rhyme, but I guess that's up to you as the author. Anyway stay blessed. I hope whatever's happening with you can be made better.
~Ruby <3
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