Hello ThisisLegacy! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.
With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!
Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.
My interpretation:
Well you already explained up there so I guess that I don't need to
Overall:
I did like it -- a very pretty poem. However, you do have some flow and grammatical issues, including but not limited to:
1. Capitalization in the beginnings of lines.
2. Punctuation at the ends of lines.
3. Line spacing.
They can be fixed by:
1. Reviewing stanzas as sentences, such as: "I hate how sometimes she drinks,/ Making herself into what others want,/ when she is perfect already." When you write it as a sentence, you get: "I hate how sometimes she drinks, Making herself into what others want, when she is perfect already." Do you see the grammatical errors? Do that with every stanza in the poem. Also, if you don't capitalize at all it'll work. You can also capitalize every single first word of a line, but I didn't notice you doing that....?
2. Well, just do the same thing up there it works.
3. Eh, I fixed those, so you're fine. Maybe read the poem out loud and see how the flow works
Keep up the great work!
Why haven’t you given me your soul yet? --
Kara
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