Hello! DragonNoir here for a review!
I think this is quite an effective poem. I really hope you'll be alright too. But, moving back to the poem, I like your rhyming pattern and the theme you've chosen. As well as this, I love this line:
"Sorry my head lies making you draw lines across your skin again"
I think you could've used some commas and/or full stops in some places. Full stops, I would say, should go on the end of lines which end a stanza. As for commas, I can think of two examples where you could've used them:
"Sorry, my anxiety..."
And
"Sorry, my head..."
Apart from that, I see nothing else wrong with it! I really like this poem!
Overall, a great poem, but you could use commas/full stops in some places in the poem.
I hope my review helped!
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