Bonjour Thisislegacy,
Je suis ici aujourd'hui pour revoir votre pièce intitulée 'Bonjour Le Monde'
Je veux juste dire que mon français n'est pas si bon que ça, je ne fais que vous embêter. Si vous pouvez comprendre jusqu'à ici, c'est vraiment impressionnant!
Bien que mon écriture ne soit pas si bonne
Il est difficile pour ceux qui ne parlent pas une autre langue de réviser un texte comme celui-ci, alors je pense que je vais revenir en arrière...
Ok, so if my translation is correct I can say that the poem is split my a contrast of opinions from the narrator, starting with a 'hello' to the world with negative comments towards people, and then a contrast with the final two stanzas.
Also as a side note reading through this. It's very impressive that you say you're learning the language when there are only a couple of minor issues wrong with the text. For that, you get the mark of approval and my respect!
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'est' translates to is and you want to say 'are' -> où toutes les personnes sont perméables
But even then, this can be interpreted in two ways, so technically what you wrote does make sense.
That is some dedication.
Anyway, there isn't anything else I can really say to you apart from the ambition to try and write in another language is inspiring and unique, especially on here with people who can speak and write the language. I look forward to the end result of learning French, as well as any other pieces you write in another language. Short and straight to the point, keep it up!
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