I built myself upon
A foundation of lies.
It towers above
The clouds and skies.
I can't keep up this facade
Of being worth any praise.
No matter what I do,
This fear and doubt stays.
I'm sorry I disappointed you.
I didn't work hard enough.
I'm sorry that you believed
My luck filled bluff.
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Heyyy!! Jay here to drop an review
So we going to get started
First i could say is i was laughing so hard at this cause what i was thinking was when you made this poem about Imposter i im like among us vibes alert all in Imposters i im like i been on the Imposter team before so i know what it feels like to be an Imposter and i also got to show you something I'm sorry I disappointed you.
I didn't work hard enough.
I'm sorry that you believed
My luck filled bluff. this was impressive and this poem was so Awesome i had enjoy a laugh from this poem
My compliment is what makes you to come up with these type of poems cause i was dead laughing at this like every part i will get to is when i laugh i im i had such a good time reading this
How you could of Improve is on keep on working and i would miss most of your work and i had enjoy a laugh from your poem thank you for your share and your impressive work
Keep Writing!
By Jay
Hi there!
I originally wanted to review this poem because I thought it would be ironic this Review Day; I'm on the imposter team. But I was also drawn to it because imposter syndrome is something I'm very much familiar with, and I was curious to see how you would handle the topic.
To start off this review: I'm really glad that I decided to read it! It really does match my experience with imposter syndrome.
These lines in particular resonated the most with me:
They captured how imposter syndrome boils down to a person working as hard as possibly can and still feeling like they need to do more to be worthy of praise. It's a toxic mindset this poem perfectly conveys.
Besides the message, I also love the structure you chose. There's only twelve lines in total, but the pairing of them in six stanzas made the message bite-size and easy to digest. It had the added benefit of putting emphasis on certain lines, especially when five out of six stanzas were technically one sentence each.
It made the apology up above feel even more heartfelt.
Critique-wise, I would love to see more of the tower metaphor you chose! My instinct is to compare imposter syndrome to acting or wearing a mask, but having it be an unsteady tower really works. I'm not sure how you could preserve the conciseness of the draft you already have while adding in more content, but I think tying in the apology to the tower would be a great way to show the reader that the speaker isn't really an imposter. They might feel like one, but that's the thing about imposter syndrome - it's just a lie that you tell yourself. If there was some way of getting an outsider's perspective by describing the tower, I think it would really add to your poem.
(Plus, you already have tower imagery going with how the poem is structured! It looks like a tower.)
All in all, I really liked this poem! Like I said in the beginning of my review, imposter syndrome is something I've dealt with, too. It was great seeing how someone else was able to convey it.
Let me know if you have any questions about my review!
Thank you for the review!
You're welcome!
As said before this poem has a really good rhyme scheme and the message that you are trying to implement is not one I have seen all over this site.
A lot of other poems have either meanings so close or have words that sound like someone is trying to write a dead beat edger-Poe.
if you want to get the maximum response from this then you need to add a little more to the poe.I feel it is one you would see on Facebook if you were add a little more pizazz you could get what is known as great work! not to say that this isnt already a good work.
Wow, great job!
I really liked how it rhymed the the meaning it had. The feeling of being someone you are not, a fake. You described this feeling beautifully of how you feel like you don't deserve anything when you are lying and a fraude. One thing I have to say is that I wish you took it further. I feel like you could really go more into depth about this emotion of feeling like an imposter.
For some reason I feel that the last line doesn't really work out for the poem.
"My luck filled bluff." This is just my oppion though, and besides that this was a great poem!
I loved every aspect about this poem and how you conveyed the feeling of being an imposter. You used great metaphors and descriptions. Can't wait to read what you write next!
Carpe diem,
LUNARGIRL
Wow! I love this poem and the meaning it conveys. I understand the feeling of pretending to be someone you are not, and you portrayed that with beautiful imagery. I don't have many critiques for this, only I wished there was more. In all honesty, this isn't even a critique, just showing how much I loved this poem, because it was so beautifully written, I wished it didn't end.
Wonderful job!!
mordax
kinda sus ngl
Can I just say that I clicked on this poem because I thought it was Among Us based? I think I have a problem--
Turned out even better than I thought it would, though CX great job, really enjoyed reading it c:
Pffttt XD
LOL
Hey! This is just going to be a short, messy review, but here it is!
I love that this rhymes. Rhyming always ties everything together.
I love the idea behind this, and the imagery that you used to get your message across.
This poem is simple, but it packs a lot of meaning, very neatly, into the 12 lines that we see.
The fact that each stanza has only 2 lines makes the poem just look... overall, nice!
Anyway, thanks for sharing!
I really enjoyed reading this poem!
It was a short poem but It had a great meaning. Feeling like an imposter, getting tired of "keeping the facade" is something I can relate to.
we all feel the burden of proving ourselves to others but at the end you realise it doesn't matter at all.
I really enjoyed your poem. I hope I can see more
Thank you!
Very powerful poem written in so few words, which makes it all the more powerful. I really like your metaphor of a tower, it was interesting. I wish that you had made it a little bit longer because it felt too short, but I guess that's your style. Overall great work!!!
Thanks!
A powerfully brief poem, painting a picture:
1. Lies of the past do not define your whole character-you have writ out the true, deeper foundation of the tower of your moral conscience in your clear guilt, and it's never to late knock over the paper blocks and build yourself anew-to even make the admission of guilt is praise worthy, that is a courageous first step towards being a man you admire!
2. Any one who won't accept true you never loved you in the first place, and if they choose not to accept you can't make them, but you'll feel a great burdened on your soul eased, plus the ability to go free and find people who love you for who you really are.
3. Every human makes mistakes-love yourself not as YOU, but exactly as you would any other human that makes mistakes. Your mistakes don't define you either. You are defined by your recognition of your mistakes, plus your ability to learn from and not repeat them.
Start today, by God!
The metaphor of the tower of lies was interesting-shame you didn't carry it through the whole poem.
Good work, and good luck!
Thank you! I'm glad you liked the tower metaphor