Hi Horisun,
I really enjoyed reading your poem. I love how the poem is short but yet has a full, developed, impactful message. I think it's really great because it also gets the reader to think a little more about possibly saying things that they regret especially in the moments when you directly address the reader by saying "you". I like how you rhymed the ending words because it gave the poem a good rhythm and feel to it. That being said, the words "words" and "swords" although they look like they rhyme, they don't. This is a problem because it disrupts the flow that you so carefully crafted in this poem. My suggestion is just changing one of the words so that it does flow better, but that's completely up to you. All in all, I think that you did a wonderful job with this poem and I can't wait to read your future works. Good luck!
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