Fairy tails,
Childs stories,
are they true?
Of course not.
But there's that doubt,
was that a werewolves howl?
Or a giants growl?
Does he want to eat me?
Is there a fairy in that jar,
Begging to be free?
My granny says,
she's the witch of the wood.
She gave me Little Reds Hood.
I went to the shoe store,
and saw Cinders shoe.
My Mom said that's not true.
But I'm telling you, I'm sure,
that Fairy Tales are real.
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Heyy!! jay here here goes a quick short review
First i would wanna say is y'all your work be like to the top like it means impressive work and i im saying to you good job cause your work be so awesome so i would give you good work on y'all of your poems i would be glad that you started on more stuff soon and i also would like to share something with you Fairy tails,
Childs stories,
are they true?
Of course not.
But there's that doubt,
was that a werewolves howl?
Or a giants growl?
Does he want to eat me?
Is there a fairy in that jar, you did a incredible job with your piece
My compliment is do you write whats in thought or you write your poems cause that goes to most people that does poetry they will write there's or whats in thought or something but yours will always be impressive
How you could of Improve is on working hard and keep up with them good poems and i would really want to know what you do when you do your poems i would want you to start with storys one day when you ever start on one just tag me or something when you ever get a chance to start doing storys
Keep Writing!
By jay
Good poem piece and good descriptions here. Good job! I really enjoyed it.
The idea behind this work is quite unique. Every word is well-chosen and correct.
I wish it was a bit longer so I could enjoy more.
The ending and the last line of your work is also unique and interesting. Amazing work!
I hope to read more of your nice work soon.
Keep writing!
Firstly I want to say I love the idea behind this poem, that feeling of not quite being able to shake off the stories and myths of childhood, of knowing something's not real but being afraid of it or hopeful for it anyway is really relatable, and it's a very original thing to write about, so well done!
I think stanzas could improve the flow of the poem, but you might be having the same problem as me with not knowing how to put them in, or maybe you like the way the ideas flow into one another, which is effective in creating the childlike rush of ideas, but in my opinion a couple breaks could ease the reading.
I also really like the personal touch that comes from using first person, and things like 'my granny', it helps convey the relatability of the poem.
I hope you create more on this theme because I haven't seen anything like it and would love to read more!
Thank you!
Hi there!
This is a cute poem! It brought a smile to my face, which I needed, so thank you for that! The only thing I want to point out is the very first line, you used the wrong "tails." Isn't English so confusing sometimes!? Also, in the case that you are using it in, "Werewolves" should be "Werewolf's." At least that flows better in my mind. Words like that, I'm not sure it really matters.
Looking forward to more from you!
Thankyou so much!