AHH! The last line just took the entire poem to a next level of awesomeness!
I love the intensity of the lines, how powerful they are. Like when you say,
I breathe you in
The air here
It feels so thin
Here, your feelings seem so intense, passionate about pizza. As a fellow pizza lover, I can totally and sincerely appreciate the sentiment.
Also, in this stanza:
You're on fire
Steaming
So hot it's dire
Once again, the lines seem very powerful and intense.
If you meant it to be this way, I'm sorry (In that case please ignore this), but I don't think dire is the right word in that line. The rhyme sounds nice, but I feel like it doesn't make complete sense. Once again, I apologise if I'm in the wrong about it.
The next stanza is the perfect ode to pizza. I think the line "Angelic; Divine" perfectly describes the wonderful phenomenon of a pizza.
On the whole, this is a hilarious poem. I certainly wasn't expecting that last line, and when I read it, it made me laugh me so loud! If there is a fan club for pizza, this poem should be the motto.
Can't wait to read more of your work! <33
Keep writing!
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