Today, I feel nothing but glee.
Todays my brothers day to do dishes,
I'm just glad it isn't me.
'Cause doing dishes is the worst.
And I highly doubt
That I'm the first
To hate doing chores,
And dishes is basically
Just sleeping and snores.
Anyway, I walk through the kitchen.
I check the clock,
Its about three ten.
Brother has finished cleaning each dish,
I go to get water,
But something stenches like a fish.
I let out a shocked gasp,
I take a step back,
The glass falls from my grasp.
For you see, he assigned me a terrible fate.
He has done something quite grim.
In the cupboard he placed dirty cups and a plate.
So now, on my day to clean,
I have to do twice the work,
To give plates their shiny sheen.
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This is hilarious. I love how you made this a poem instead of a short story. You got a big laugh out of me. I love "To hate doing chores,
And dishes is basically
Just sleeping and snores." Looking forward to reading more of your stuff!
What a awesome and funny poem i really loved it. You right i do not like it when it is my day of washing dishes.Anytime i am washing the dishes i will think of this poem to cheer me up. I loved how the words were flowing. I really loved the rhythm and the tone. You just managed to keep it kind and funny through out the poem. Great work can not wait to read more of your work. Keep on writing this is great work:)
I feel like this is something me and my sister would do to each other when we had to take turns doing chores. Another thing we would do is acidently have to stay at school or had an emergency so the other person would have to do the work. siblings can be so funny. i live this because it reminds me of all the fun times with siblings and family. good post.
This is a great poem. if this is true then im sorry he didnt was the cups and plate and im also grossed out that that would happen. it reminds me of my brother who isnt very good at washing dishes either. he would not scrub hard enough and there would be dried up milk at the bottom or in the crevices. Sooo grosss. x__X Sorry you had to (re)wash the dishes, that sucks like alot.
This is a great poem
JoeTamez
Hello Horisun!
I have to say, this poem got a little laugh out of me. I have quite the handful of siblings, and as such have been in this situation before.
So, I see as far as rhyme scheme, you've got an aba pattern going on. You do a pretty good job staying with your rhythm and an established verse length.
You do an excellent job with your descriptions, I especially love the fishy smell-it's oh so accurate.
The only thing I change is,
"Stenches" is not a word in that way, "but something has the stench of fish" may work better.
Great job and keep on writing!
Thank you for the review!