Dragonslaying is Not a Viable Career Path

Ack, we meet again. I don't mind it. I enjoy this poem because it is almost humorous to me. Seeing as he killed the dragon and reached for what he truly wanted but in the end, it almost wasn't worth it. Did the dragon actually pose a threat? What did he think he would be able to do with the interesting stuff he'd bring back? You did say he lived like a king but how did the king treat him? Couldn't he not have traded or sold them to the king for some sorts of benefits? I feel like there would be some way around it but despite it, great job! Keep writing!

Until next time.

Hi there!

I wanted to leave a quick review. I really enjoyed your poem which had the perfect balance of comical cynicism and a sad dose of reality. You expose the nature of the essential worthlessness of riches when the currency of the location is basic necessities for survival. I think my favorite part and by far the snarkiest is the last stanza:
"Sad as it is
Gold causes indigestion
So when it comes to Dragon Slaying
Don't plan on investing"

Now for the review! This is just a suggestion, but I recommend either referring to the Town as just that or a Village, I noticed you used both terms. I think the poem would be more succinct if you used the same term both places, especially because it's capitalized so there's importance to the name. That's how I interpreted it.

And about the capitalization, I really like your use of it. It's a great way to draw attention to the key elements of your poem though it did seem a little inconsistent. I was wondering what your reason was for it and how you decided which words to capitalize (just something I thought about as I read your poem).

I also noticed that you wrote most of the poem in past tense but in the following stanza you wrote in present tense, and I think keeping it in past tense would help it to flow better and have more consistency:
"As the Storm persists,
And our Hero grows thinner
What poor baker would want
A necklace for dinner?"

All in all, I really liked your poem and I look forward to reading more from you. Keep writing!

-PoetryMisfit

its a pity the dragon didn't hoard like . . . necessities

great poem

Hey Horisun!! I'm back with a review!!
I don't know I found the poem really sad .
Was there no place where he could sell diamonds to get money? Just kidding.
The poem was written in good humor. And I really enjoyed it. The flow was great. It was a good blend of humor, sorrow and also ungratefulness of the villagers!!( or atleast I felt that!)
They shoulve served him for all his life. He saved all of theirs :]
Anyways, the poem was great and made me smile.
Just coming from reviewing you other work too, and seriously your writings are phenomenal. Seems like youre crystal clear about what you're going to write and that just reflects in your poems. Amazing job!!
Keep writing coz you're so good at it!!

I just came here to say that you have just dEsTrOyEd mY dRaGoN-sLaYiNg dReAmS


(oh yeah, and awesome poem!)

I.....wow. That just made my day, and my day has been pretty great. That was a brilliant composition of a lighthearted and comical poem. It made me, and most likely many others, smile. There are few things in this world that can draw forth pure and simple amusement. This was truly a masterpiece. Please don’t mind my melodrama, it’s a side affect of being a writer😋

Hello there! Mordax here for a review.

Um.... Wow!!! I loved this poem. No, seriously, this poem is absolutely amazing. When I started reading it, I already knew I was in for a treat, but I legit smiled as I continued and when I ended. You perfected this tone that is both sorrowful, honest, and comical. I honestly have no critique to provide in ways of flow, word choice, or imagery. You captured it all and while the poem got your point across and needs nothing else, I still found myself longing for more. That's how good this is.

This is such an original and unique concept for a poem!! I love this idea of a hero being idolized and loved and still "failing" when it comes to life. I love this idea that his world-saving work doesn't make a living, showing the importance of the little things, like each "simple" job of the civilians in the town.

Honestly, I am astounded by your talent. I want to bottle up this poem and keep it with me just to read whenever I wish. My favorite stanza is the final one, specifically the line "Gold causes indigestion". This line shows so much: not only the unrealistic applications of these heroics, but also the way wealth has been raised upon a pedestal, how we all strive after this "gold", but in the end, how important is it really?

That's all I have for you. I could go on for hours how much I loved this poem...

Wonderful job!!!!!!

mordax

I agree with wallflower. This is beautiful.

Hello! Haraya here with a quick review.

I applaud this poem for having that sense of wonder that I enjoy in poetry. You used a seemingly playful and fantastical image of a knight returning triumphantly from a quest to convey serious themes of materialism and personal aspiration. It's amazingly thought-provoking that rewards curious readers if they dig further in.

Each stanza is packed with detail. The idea that a successful knight carrying home treasures is expected to become king but ends up broke is ingenious. You made it all flow believably by tackling how each piece of treasure is actually worthless. I especially liked the one with the blacksmith. Really, gems can buy a sword, but it's the metal that makes it.

As for points of improvement, I think the last two stanzas can be further improved. It works but compared to the rest of the poem, I think those were the least impactful, which is crucial because it's the ending of the poem, so much of the poem's overall impact hinges on it.

Overall, brilliant work! You got my curiosity to check out your other works. Please accept my follow!

This was... a masterpiece.