Young Writers Society

Ahoy there, fellow victim of the bee venom! My heart goes out to you, for I too have suffered the wrath of these creatures who make their living by nibbling away at our skin. But fear not, for though we may be plagued by these bloodthirsty beasts, we can take comfort in the fact that we are not alone in our plight. Because if we can't beat them, at least we can laugh at their expense! And now, with all that said and done, I bid you a most enthusiastic and bug-free "hi!"

People can easily relate to you and that's a great thing about writing. I write poems too, but I've never read one like this before. It is short and has the humor in it which is amazing and makes the poem even better. Bees can be pretty annoying sometimes and you've done a great job of saying that in the most perfect poetic way possible.


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No matter what I do
Not even the metric
Ton of insect spray

Can keep them all
Buzzing, buzzing
Far, far, away
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I agree with you so much, this part is just an explanation of what the problem is here. A "ton of insect spray" is not even enough.

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Oh how I wish
So very dearly
That all these

Cursed creatures
These bloodsucking
Creepy-Crawlies

Would stop bugging me
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This would probably be the best piece of poetry for me. I feel like you've been searching for hours to find the most perfect words to describe those cursed creatures, bloodsucking, creepy-crawly bees.

Well, it's time for me to buzz off, but before I go, let me wish you all the best. May your life be filled with as much sweetness as a hive full of honey, and may you never be stung by the troubles that life can sometimes bring.

-Rose

https://rosewriting12.blogspot.com/

Here's a lit comment coming your way! First, I love the pun at the end! Made me chuckle. This poem seems very shapely. The formatting makes it look a bit rounded or oval and that kind of highlights the image of the bumps from insect bites, to me. As always, really enjoy the rhymes you put into your poems -- "spray/away" is one of my favourites. c:

Hello!

RandomTalks here with a short review!

I am really not used to reviewing poetry so I apologize beforehand for not being able to offer a detailed or very helpful review. I will share my general thoughts about it though!

I think my favorite thing about this poem is how simple and relatable it is. There is no hidden or underlying meaning behind the words. Its just a simple thought expressed in a fun and creative way, that is easy to understand and connect with.

Nibble, Nibble
At my skin
Why bother me?

Bumpy blemishes
Red marks
Run along my knee

Hey there, Horisun! mint here with a review ^^ It's been a while since I've reviewed poetry, but I'll do my best. xD
Overall, I found this a cute and relatable piece (bug bites are definitely annoying!). The rhyming words in the last line of each stanza are a nice touch. C: The short lines in this poem also give it a bouncy feeling, which I like! I can almost imagine the narrator saying a line, stopping to scratch a bug bite or swat away an insect, then saying the next line. =P
My favorite part of this poem would have to be the first two stanzas because they have a very pleasant rhythm to them. I don't know if you noticed this, but "Nibble, Nibble" and "Why bother me?" both have four syllables total, and "Bumpy blemishes" and "Run along my knee" both have five syllables total. I think that's one of the reasons I found those two stanzas so fun to read in my head.

Alright, now for some specifics...

No matter what I do
Not even the metric
Ton of insect spray

Would stop bugging me