Hullo DG! Cat here to review this lovely poem in the spirit of review day! I'm going to try a different style of reviewing, so I hope this still helps!
I really love your imagery and the way you tell this story. Some of my favorite lines were "sprouting green leaves full of chlorophyll" and "while it never knows if the next year it’ll live."
Now I do have a few suggestions for you. Starting with the 'early spring' section, over on this line; "there are quite a few trees, already, sporting buds." I don't think that any of the commas are necessary. Here; "sweet, small, little things," I'm not sure if the comma after small is needed, but I could very well be wrong here. Moving along; "the breeze whispering into their ears secrets." is a bit confusing on how you formatted the line. I would go for "the breeze whispering secrets in their ears." or something similar so I know for sure what you are trying to say here.
Moving on to 'late spring', this line; "of light, and love, and beauty." is to remove the 'and' before love because that was how I naturally read it. Also; "and then look at the one alone one, not even budding," in this one you need to take out one of the 'one's and either have 'the alone one' or 'the one alone' as I feel that having both is a bit confusing.
Onto 'late fall' as I have no suggestions for the other sections; here "even now, some trees still obtain their leaves," I feel that 'obtain' is not the word you were looking for. According to Google, 'obtain' means "get, acquire, or secure (something)" which does't feel like it fits here. I would go for 'keep' or a synonym for that.
My last suggestion is for 'early winter'. Here; "spreading, getting stuck in other branches," I would either switch the first comma for a semi-colon or for 'and'.
To finish this off, I just want to say that this is all my suggestions to improve this and that you don't have to change your poem if you don't feel the need to.
Well, great job! Keep writing!
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