Hi there! Radrook here to give a review. Thanks for posting this veery interesting poem. I like the reference to shoes being worn out because of the futility of precious efforts. Also the imagery of being run off a track is nice. The rhyming is perfect as is the meter.
It would have been interesting to hear exactly what people were saying so we can see why he considered this things fucked up. Since the reader doesn’t know he can’t evaluate whee your dad’s evaluation of such things is justified or not. But the poem’s purpose isn’t to convince us. It is merely to show in a very forceful way how your dad was feeling at that particular time. I would say that it succeeded in conveying that frustration very well and in a very artuistic and entertaining manner.
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