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im shaking
im scared
i want to cry
but
my sister and my dogs are in the room
so i cant
not in front of them
i cant even type this right
help me
help me please
i want to huddle
in a ball
and never come out
sweater town isn't here
someone just
someone just told me to
fucking
kill
myself
online on one of my favorite websites
now i want to do it
because that's all anyone
says to me lately on
different nerd medias
"kill yourself"
"kill yourself"
"kill yourself"
and i feel like
i am getting into a mental state
a g a i n
im sorry if i hurt anyone in advance
now im crying
at my computer screen
while my sister is besides me
looking at her phone
not seeing my face through the youtube
and i cant
i cant with this life anymore
i wish that everyone would just
die
and that everything will
die
and i hope to go to
hell
so i can experience more
pain
i just cant
i cant
icant
icanticanticanticanticanticant
i cant
no i cant
no
i
cant
im shaking
im cold
i cant move
paralyzed
im not
not
not
good enough
nobody wants me
i cant get farther
i just cant
im just going to
i cant
no
im not perfect
no one is perfect
i am not fucking perfect
when i am called perfect
it makes me think about what they want
is it money
is it attention
i cant even provide those
its just plain not possible
and i need a
hug
someone
right now
i cant anymore
i just
im crying
i just want to grab a
kitchen knife
rope
mace
and
stab
hang
bash in
myself to
end all of the fucking pain
it wont get better
i wont get better
and you claim that you feel pain
what pain do you feel
no one will feel pain if i die
thats not true
im alone
ha
i am alone
fucking
completely
alone
i just cant
im alone
and cold
no
soul
nothing
life
anything
just emptiness
and darkness shrouding
all of me
im not here
sweater town isnt here
instead i am in hell
burning away into
ashes
dust
nothingness
and i cant breathe
i cant
nose stuffed up
lungs crushed
heart crushed
i am poeming
to save my life
even if its not working
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Oh my gosh, this is just... sad. Like, this is depressingly sad. @zaminami, remember that I am here for you, alright? I'd be really sad if you were to cry and kill yourself. Wait, wait, hold on a sec. *clears throat and starts singing* YOU ARE AMAZING, AMAZING, JUST THE WAY YOU ARE!
Hope that made you feel better. Just remember: YOU ARE AMAZING. 'kay? Good.
Oh, if you need to PM me at any time, click on my PM button and start typing whatever. <3
I'm fine! This was a year ago, so it's not a huge deal
Oh, I saw February 2. Whoops, I didn't see that it was 2018. Whoopsie! XD
This is really saddening and disturbing. One thing to keep in mind is that there is very effective medication to alleviate strong mood swings. So going to a physician is very important.
Yes, your poem has indeed succeeded in stirring emotions and eliciting empathy from others who care.
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Hi Radrook! For the future, can you keep preachings of god off of my works? I am an atheist with bad memories and experiences with various Christians so I don%u2019t want it on my work. You can do it everywhere else, but just not on mine. Thanks for the review anyhow!
It isn't on your work. It is on my review of your work. your work stands as it was written-untouched by any of my comments. Please note that justy as you have a right to post your work, we as reviewers have a right to give our opinion on the work or to offer the advice we feel the person might need, That ibn no way vilates your righht to express what you wish. Yiour wiork stands untouched.
I know it%u2019s not on the work itself, but I want to stay away from Christianity. Just something to keep in mind
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Thanks!
DO NOT DO IT.
DON'T.
I'M GOING TO CRY.
I CAN NOT LOSE YOU KARA, NEVER.
HANG ON, PLEASE. HANG ON.
LET ME TAKE YOUR HAND AND WE'LL HANG ON TOGETHER.
PLEASE DON'T DO IT.
I LOVE YOU KARA.
OF COURSE YOU AREN'T PERFECT, BUT THAT'S WHAT MAKES YOU PERFECT.
KEEP POEMING.
I LOVE YOU.
I WILL NOT LOSE YOU, HANG ON.
I WILL LITERALLY GIVE YOU EVERY INTERNET HUG POSSIBLE AND ONE DAY THE BIGGEST PHYSICAL HUG EVER. *HUG* *HUG HUGHUGHUGHUGHUGHUG*
IGNORE THE ***HOLES WHO WERE STUPID ENOUGH TO TELL YOU THOSE THINGS.
THEY ARE THE ONES WHO WANT ATTENTION, THEY ARE IDIOTS WHO DON'T KNOW THEIR *** FROM THEIR FACE, AND I DON'T WISH THAM DEATH, JUST THAT THEY GET ****ING EDUCATED.
LET THIS WARM YOU!
LET MY WORDS INTO YOUR HEART AND WARM YOU!
I KNOW IT'S CHEESY, BUT PLEASE GET AWAY FROM THE COLD.
I DON'T EXACTLY KNOW HOW YOU FEEL, TO BE HONEST, BUT I HAVE BEEN TO DARK PLACES TOO!
AND YOU WERE ONE OF THE PEOPLE WHO HELPED ME OUT!
PLEASE DON'T DIE!
PLEASE.
I'M BEGGING YOU.
AND WHY?
because, kara, i ****ing love you. not because i want attention or money, or because you subscribed to my club, or your following me. i love you because i got to know you. i got to see how sassy you could be, how even though you said certain things a certain way, i understood what you meant. i know i haven't known you love, but you are one of the most talented people i've met on yws! you are really awesome and nice, with a hint of spice! XD thank you for staying alive long enough for me to meet you... please stay alive, there are so many people who haven't been blessed with your presence like me. please kara. i love you. <3 You are strong and you can make it.
~Angel<3
honestly, little things i notice you do make me smile to myself
*cough* like liking your own work *cough*
why is this a review.
idk i didn't mean to make it one oops... i'll donate the points i got to her hold on...
okay, done
wait are you spamming me? no seriously i've no idea what it looks like
Kara....ya know what I said last Friday, about what I wanted to do? This is how I felt. I know that you think everything is total s*** right now, but guess what, you have someone. No, not someone, someones! Emma, me, Angel, Izzy, Ash, even Sam. You can't tell me that you don't have anyone to help you, or any one that would care, because you do. Now, you know something? When I write a poem, about how I hate myself, or I'm drowning in sadness? Well, I cry when i do it, it helps me. Whether you knew that or not, I do.
And I like Sweater Town too. It's a good place to hide, sometimes to cry, and it's always warm there. But Sweater Town doesn't help sometimes, like right now. I know you want to die, and I do too, but I can't. At least, not anymore.
Kara...I went to the doctor yesterday, and I was diagnosed with anger issues (which isn't really surprising) and suicidal thoughts. I want to cut, I honestly do...but like you said, it doesn't help. What does help is talking to someone who can relate, like me, Emma, Sam, everyone else I listed above. I'm too lazy to write out the rest of their names. Anyway, I promise that you will be okay. Maybe not tonight, maybe not tomorrow, maybe even not in a month, but if you kill yourself, do you realize how many people will actually CARE? Do you realize how much pain you will leave in your wake? I won't be able to live without knowing that you're gonna be confused as all hell when you walk into something unexpectedly, when you sass people and we laugh because it's you, when you tell us that everything will be okay when we're at our lowest points.
And I know everyone else feels the same way. So, please....please stay alive. Keep breathing....and keep being the wonderful Kara we all know and love. Please....for Emma...for Angel...for Izzy.....for Sam... for Ash.
For me.
*sigh* Ok, I saw you write this. I saw the I can't's and the terrifing words that say you want to kill yourself. I see what you are saying. But you need to understand that you are breathing, even if you can't tell. You need to understand that you are not alone, even if I hardly know you. I am here to talk, to listen, to joke around, to cheer you up, to stay up late into the night to make sure that you get better. I am here, for you. Always. Ok? And don't tell I am not. Because I am.
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so you rate it 18 and then you tag me... lol i'm so confused
well, off to read it!!!