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Hello!!

I totally like your work! It is very meaningful. In fact, I have learned so much Your poem takes me back to reality. It makes me ponder about certain things in life. It took me back to the choices I've made in the past as well.

I hope you will continue writing poems like these. Continue to inspire a lot

really nice. Simply yet complex

Hey Legacy! I was just looking for something to review when I came upon your work. I think that you are a great poet as you can interpret the things what others can't, in a poetic way. It is actually a very good poem, with quite a deep meaning. The shorter the poem, the deeper the meaning. Keep up the good work.
Best of luck!

Thanks for sharing:

The poem very effectively conveys the dichotomy of a human mind by depicting one side urging suicide while the other refusing to comply. Setting these two in separate stanzas enhances the divisive impression intended.

My first reaction as a reader is concern. Then a wondering about what might be causing such an inner conflict that imperils the person's life. Could it be based on an imbalance of cerebral neurotransmitters which forces the person to obsess constantly over negative thoughts?

Or could it perhaps be due to the supernatural forces which the Bible describes as evil and dedicated to cause as much harm to humans as possible before they meet ultimate destruction?

For the first I feel like recommending that the speaker seek professional medical help. For the second I feel like advising the speaker to seek spiritual help via seeking our Creator's help.

Hello Thisislegacy! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.

My interpretation:

Overall:

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Hey CorruptedArrow here! You have a good start, to your poem.
"Stay in control,
Don't listen to your head,
You know it just
wants you to be dead." There is no need for this many commas, one is enough. But how you are telling this poem; "Stay in control. Don't listen to your head. You know it just wants you to be dead." Periods can be used. I makes more sense. I'm not trying to be mean here I'm just trying to help.

"Lose control
Cry, scream
You know what happened
wasn't just a dream." The only thing you need to fix is, putting a period at the end of "Scream". Theses are all the problems I found, but you keep going with the poem.