Hi there @Casa I am here to do a review on your work first things first.
What I like
then i just liked the sound of your laugh, I like this for it reminds my of my sister for I like the sound of her laughs.
What needs work
that comes with the passage of time? every one has heart brakes over time and you need to lern how to control them at all costs.
no, what is the no doing I do not see why you are saying no.
pleading with us, I do not no why and what this sentins means why have you put it here what is its yous to you.
to not do something. why do you want me to do this why you should be doing something this is a bit stranch.
that my voices told me i shouldn't do, why did you do it if yo voices told you not to do it this is stranch and seeming like it is uncontrolled
hindsight is twenty twenty, i suppose, dose this in vol v math to it, for some reasen I am getting the feeling yes.
but as were you, I think this could do with one more word.
Suggestions
1 for: but as were you, but as were you with me, so that is all that I can say, so keep up with the good work. HAPPY REVIEW DAY.
@EagleFly out to seek and kill
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