Hey, izanami! Today I'll be reviewing this poem because I thought it looked really cool. I'll be ditching my usual formula and revert to positive/negative for this. Here we go!
*Translation for reference:
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all i am is a person,
created by robots,
raised by aliens,
friends with flaws.
that's why i claim i'm a demon,
since they are perfect,
yet very flawed.
but that's not who i am.
so i will show you all
who i really am and can be.
but no one will truly know
all of me and what's inside.
Part 1: The Positives
This poem opens up huge windows of innovation for the poem scene. Now take this with a grain of salt since I'm no poetry guru (I honestly suck at making some myself.), but I do believe that this is the most creative poem I've ever seen. It's very deserving of the literary spotlight.
It can also be said that the formation of the poem is done nicely. I've seen some poems with awkward spacing, but here, it's fine. +1 for good organization!
Part 2: The Negatives w/ some nitpicks (REMEMBER: ART IS SUBJECTIVE!)
Here is what will be covered:
-The "style" of the poem
-Time spent translating
-Some nitpicks
Starting with the style, wow, was my Grammarly Extension having a field day! I do know that the story is supposed to look robotic and artificial, but the point of view is stated to be from a human? I just generally confused by word choice here.
Most of the time spent reading this poem isn't reading at all, it's taking the time to convert binary into text, even when the words were very simple (*example above). alliyah had already covered this, so I'm not gonna tell you about the translating for more than I have to.
Finally, nitpicks.
-Once again, the style is weird for me. I think that just normal text would work, but it's your poem.
-Word choice (i.e. Is a person created by robots and raised by aliens? Someone should make a story out of that.)
Well, that's my review. I hope my commentary was helpful to you in any way, shape, or form, for that is the purpose of all reviews. Anyway, the arbitrary rating for 0110001101101111011001000110010101100100 (coded) is 4.5 flaws out of 5, in other words, a 4.5/5! Have a FANTASTICAL DAY!
-FW76
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