Falling Conversations and Lost Children

Hey fallen here to review.

So I find that there has to be a deeper meaning in this poem, the interference that I find is that perhaps that either one of them were loss and it is a grief poem and or it is just remembrances of one who was lost into the stars. I enjoyed how it was a conversation between a boy and girl and I liked how you did it. Only question was what was the purpose of doing the sentence like this " I've since ran with a ;girl; who said she'd fallen in love
with my conversations." it looks like its grammical incorrect even if it's probably right. Other than that one last question is " d'you ,s'not" slang because if so that was a very nice touch if not * mind blown*

My next thoughts were that at first bat at reading I had no idea what this poem was talking about or what it should be about, all I saw was a conversation with amazing imagery. But after further analysis certain things began to click as I tried to form what the meaning of this poem about which was quite fun for you could read this poem a hundred times and come up with a different thought each time.

Overall, I found this poem fascinating and very intruding that held my attention the whole time Well done and keep it up

Hiho, Korlix here for a review.

I find the poem extraordinary. I get a sense of a deeper meaning in this rather than just a conversation between a boy and a girl. However, poems are much like art, it is in the view of the interpreter to judge what it is supposed to reflect.

The beginning of the "balloon" and the ending of "airs and plastic ... we fly for the high", can give the same image of what i interpret as words being meaningless. Of course that is only my personal interpretation and does not have to reflect what you had in mind. However, the fact that the rest of the poem relates to a conversation "chatted smoke ... talk is just all i have to make float" and a sense of meaningless words, gives this overall image. I would even go a step further, saying that the partial gibberish given is completely intended to just state black on white HOW meaningless words can be.

I did not quiet follow why you decided to pick words as "d'you ... s'not". Maybe to go to an even higher level of the meaningless image presented? Or just a little joke on the sense of colloquialism?

To finish off, i personally found the poem quiet fascinating. First I seemed lost on all what is said but on further inspection, I managed to see an overall interpretation. As with all poems, my personal interpretation can be wrong but it is what i see in the poem as a whole.

Watch 'The Matrix' much?
Seriously, what is this about, getting high?
I think the poem confuses me more than anything and I decipher stuff like how the Final Fantasy games fit together. (Still haven't figured it out.)

Okay, from a professional stand point, this poem is very well done. But it still loses it's meaning in the murk of your word choice. I would have less of a problem translating Japanese!

I think this poem is good and all but I still wonder...
Any whom, my most educated guess is that this about two kids, a boy and a girl, that meet and become friends. Then they...get hammered? I don't know, I really don't.

I'm sorry if I see this wrong but, what is happening at the end?

Hiya Audy, CrystalPony21 here to review this AWESOME work of literature for you! So here is what I though:

Okay, this is great! The grammar got an 8 from me, spelling 9 and a half because technically if you use your grammar wrong its not a word. And lastly, emotion got a sad rating of a 4 on the edge of 5 just not quite. Here is why you got these ranks in these categories. Emotion got it's rank because I read it over 3 times and still couldn't grasp what the emotion was supposed to be. This made the poem a little boring, sorry... . Now, grammar and spelling first of all 'd'you' isn't a word, it would usually be the contraction of would and you. But I think you meant it as the mix of did and you instead. This is why, next 's'not' isn't a word either, I see you trying to contract its and not, its is already a contraction. You can't mix and contraction because its already BEEN contracted. Its just against the rules of grammar. I understand, these are simple mistakes. People you s'not as a word all the time when talking but the fact is it doesn't count. Otherwise this was a wonderful poem, creative and interesting. Its well written and I can tell it's author must be pretty good ! Keep writing 'cause I want to keep reading !
~CrystalPony21