Heya, Audy! Casanova here to do a review!
The firs thing I didn't really like was the repetition of,"These boots I..." it felt a little played out and redundant, at least to me. One of these would have been enough, with the poem continuing where the last line stopped at. Anyway, onward.
The next thing I noticed were these lines-
who know their way back home across the Whitestone Bridge into Pelham
who dive their soles into puddles and graze slumped along the cobblestone
These lines were a bit off, I guess you could say. I assume you're talking about your roots to begin with, but then you say,"know their way back home," and realize your roots are your home, so I assume you're talking about the boots. But it wouldn't make sense to be talking about the boots.
I'm sorry for the crap review, but overall I do feel like this is a really good poem with minor nitpicks to be had, and that's all on perspective and style preferences. So props on the good work, I don't think I'll attempt this again.
That's all I have to say on this one.
Keep on doing what you're doing, and keep on keeping on.
Sincerely, Cas
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