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A/N: Do people even do ANs anymore, or is that considered bad form?
ANYWAY, this is experimental and I feel odd because I'm trying on a different voice, it's like trying on shoes. So general impressions would be awesome and I'll review you back if you link me to something c:
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Hello Audy! I can't remember when I've last reviewed a poem by you!
I should read more of your works because this was really nice! I'm just usually not capable of giving that in-depth reviews on poetry so that might be why I've missed your poems before!
My definite favourite bit is the second bit with the qualifications. However, I felt like "or no work?" destroyed the flow a bit, so I think I would prefer it without that question at all. I tried to read it again as if it wasn't there, and I don't think it would make it too confusing. My mind just wanted to continue right after "work?"
I wasn't too keen on the word "badass" in this. There are poems where it would fit in even worse than this one, but somehow it still felt a liiiittle out of place. Not too much though, just a little. xD But I loved "I'm available all day Sundays". That flowed perfectly!
As the badass bit, I stopped at " 'em". It's probably just a personal thing, but I don't really like contractions in literary works (like, other than isn't and doesn't and the lot) for some reason? Unless it's dialogue. And I guess this sort of is because the speaker is "I"... I don't know. Something in that made me pause.
One more thing that I wasn't a fan of was the very ending. I felt like "I just want to wake but I can't" was almost borderline angsty, for some reason. I feel awful saying that, but I can't come up with a better word to describe it. I'd love for the ending to be like woah because the rest of the poem is so enjoyable, but at the moment, it's a bit anti-climactic.
I'm not sure what else to say other than despite all the bits I pointed out I didn't like, I really liked this poem as a whole. I've never read a poem about a mole before, so that was cool.
Anyway, yes, I liked it overall!
Hi, I don't know what this was about hahah. But don't be insulted, I could just be a little uneducated or slow perhaps. Anyway! What I can make of it, is that there is some vile (but nicely used
) language in here, which adds to the subtle intensity of the poem. Also, it is admirable that you went for something unique, with that qualifications section. I was rather impressed by that. So, did this have something to do with a job application or something? I would love it if you could clear things up for my confused head for me 
Good work, Legy.
Well, I'm not really sure what to make of this. It's different that's for sure.
I like the voice you used for the mole, it was original and humorous.
I know that the mole is probably a metaphor for something, I just haven't figured it out it. Maybe people who have been forgotten, those who are considered lacking in potential, or simply those who are lost both physical and mentally. I don't know.
It is a really good poem, and the way that you describe the mole is excellent.
I'm just not smart enough to truly understand it.
Nargles xxx
oh fff nonsense. That's exactly who the mole is
Thank you <3
Ohhh, yay! I got it right!