Young Writers Society

Greetings, this is a great poem I love how eloquently you write.
it brings to mind reflections had late at night with the wind blowing the trees, an owl in a tree and the only light comes from the full moon... maybe I'm reading too much into this... and this definitely isn't coming from personal experience. Anyway, its pretty well written, some of your rhymes could use a bit of work but other than that its very good.

Hi,
This is a great poem, I love your language and imagery - you feel as though you're the character experiencing a moment of reflection - which especially seeing as we're here in lockdown, a lot of us will be doing - so well done! My only suggestion for an improvement would be:

Truth there is none

But no, they do not lie

For lo: they hold my hearts greatest fire,

Staring at my reflection in the mirror,

Will life hold my greatest desire?

Perhaps if you added an ending section like this, you'll really be able to build upon the immersive experience, but this is just suggestions, your work you do what you wanna of course! Keep writing - you're a really really really talented writer and I look forward to seeing more of your work!

Hi there!

Like a dying sun

Sharing it's rays of light

With curtesy do I speak my words

But no, they do not lie

For lo: they hold my hearts greatest fire

The sweet songs of poetry

Hi! I just thought you should know that this poem is truly one of the most eloquent pieces I have ever written. My favorite line is "With curtesy do I speak my words That are barely heard", it hints that maybe when you or the subject speaks, they are not heard. Or maybe they are heard just not understood. Or maybe not taken seriously. There are so many ways to interpret those lines!!!
I was a little confused on the lines, "Where life and laughter is Truth there is none" does this mean in the eyes of the subject there is a sense of falsity behind every life and laugh? Even if I don't completely understand it, I still think it's extremely moving and thought provoking.
This is more than a work of art, it's a MASTERPIECE!!!

Hi Illy!

Let me just say, wow! That was beautifully written! I have only dappled in poetry, but you did a great job tying it all together. I especially like the rhyme you added, "Like a dying sun... Truth there is none." Beautiful. The rhythm and there is a grace about it. iI like the last line, "The sweet songs of poetry." It really brings it together at the end.
Great job!